范文（情景作文）丰台一中
Last Saturday was my grandfather’s birthday. We had four activities. First, My
mother, My father and I went to the shopping at 8：00 am. We buy a new coat my grandfather with gift. Then, My father and I took a cake by myself, we spent 3 hours. We used miang milks and eggs. At 8：00 pm .My mother, My father, My grandfather and I sang Birthday’s sing. And we ate the cakes. I though the cakes was very delicours, because it was we made myself. Finally, we took photos toghter.
I felt tired but I was very happy. Because I’m do some thing for my grandfather. We had a good time.
（庞天媛）
Last Saturday was my grandfather’s birthday. In the early morming, my parents and I bought some new clothes for my grandfather. Because they were very beautiful. After then, I made a cake with my mother, I designed very big, because I loved my
grandfather very much. At 12：00 o’clock， my parents and I arrived at my grandfather’s home. My grandfather was very happy. After we ate the cake together, my grandfather said “It was very delicious and tasty”. So I was exciting a lot. Friday, in the afternoon, We took many photos in the home. I loved my family very much.
I was very tried but I had a good time. I thought this activity was very make sence. And I could my family happy. I felt very proud. I liked this activity but I prefred my family.
（刘宇然）
Last Saturday was my grandfather’s birthday. First ,we went to the supermarket.We bought a new coat. I’m glad that choose gift. Second ,I made a cake with my mother. It’s very interesting.Then,we sang”happy birthday”.We had a dinner with my grandfather. Finally, we took a photo with my grandfather.It was very happy. I felt a few tired but I felt very happy. As is well know. It’s important for us to visit grandparent. I hope we will often visit grandparent. (钟天意)
Last Saturday was my grandfather’s birthday. Last Friday, when I go home my mother and father invited me to bought cloth for my grandfather.
On last Saturday morning, my mother teached me how to make cake. Until afternoon,I was finished my cake.It was very different.
When the dinner,my grandfather saw a big cake was a bit amaze,but at sane time,he was very happy.I saw he was happy,I think myself was very succeed.My parent,I and my grandfather were singing Birthday’s
sang.Finally,we took some photos. Everything for a word,I was very tired but I felt very happy. (刘宇航)
Last Saturday was my grangfather‘s birthday. Because it was winter，I asked to my parents if we should buy a sweater for gift to my grandpa. They thought it‘s a good idea. We bought a warmly new sweater for him. what’s more，I wanted to make a cake for him too. My mother taught me how to make a cake by myself. I made it carefully and wrote “happy birthday dear grandpa”on it. When we arrived at grandpa‘s home，he was very happy. We celebrated his birthday together. He said that it was the most happiness day he had spent. After the dinner, we took a family photo. All of us had big smile across our faces . I wish my grandpa happy forever, I love him. (张晓雪)
Last Saturday was my grangfather‘s birthday. First , I went to the supermarket with my parents in the morning. We bought a gift for my grandfather. Because it’ was cold . when we arrived home, my mother decided made a cake for grandfather. I was so glad to help mother made a cake together. Then ,our family had a wonderful dinner . the cake was very good. My grandfather was very happy to see this. We not only singing a “happy birthday ”song,but also played some games, it was so funny. After dinner, we took photo together. The photo keeped our happy face. To sum up, I had a wonderful day with my family in last Saturday. ( 周萌 )
错误问题归类 （丰台一中）
1. 词汇错误：
1）My mother, My father, My grandfather and I sang Birthday’s sing. Finally, we took photos toghter.
2）I though the cakes was very delicours, because it was we made myself.
3） In the early morming,
4）As is well know
5）Last Friday, when I go home my mother and father invited me to bought cloth for my grandfather.
6）On last Saturday morning, my mother teached me how to make cake.
7）The photo keeped our happy face.
2. 句型错误：
1）My mother, My father and I went to the shopping at 8：00 am.
2） I designed very big,
3）All of us had big smile across our faces .
4）The photo keeped our happy face.
3. 语法错误：
1）We buy a new coat my grandfather with gift.
2） I though the cakes was very delicours, because it was we made myself.
3）Because I’m do some thing for my grandfather. We had a good time.
4）I put the cake on the table and song “Happy birthday” to my grandfather.
5）I felt a few tired but I felt very happy.
6）Last Friday, when I go home my mother and father invited me to bought cloth for my grandfather.
7）On last Saturday morning, my mother teached me how to make cake.
8）Because it was winter，I asked to my parents if we should buy a sweater for gift to my grandpa.
9）I was finished my cake. It was very different.
10）He said that it was the most happiness day he had spent.
11）When we arrived home, my mother decided made a cake for grandfather.
12）We not only singing a “happy birthday ”song, but also played some games, it was so funny.
13）The photo keeped our happy face.
4. 逻辑错误:
1）After we ate the cake together, my grandfather said “It was very delicious and
tasty”. So I was exciting a lot.
2）Friday, in the afternoon, We took many photos in the home. I loved my family very much
3）I liked this activity but I prefred my family.
4）We bought a gift for my grandfather. Because it’ was cold.
5. 汉式英语：
1）We used miang milks and eggs.
2）Friday, in the afternoon, We took many photos in the home. I loved my family
very much.
3）On last Saturday morning, my mother teached me how to make cake.
4）When the dinner, my grandfather saw a big cake was a bit amaze, but at sane time, he was very happy.
5）when we arrived home, my mother decided made a cake for grandfather.
6）We not only singing a “happy birthday ”song,but also played some games, it was so funny.
7）The photo keeped our happy face.
6. 写作习惯错误：
1）First ,we went to the supermarket. We bought a new coat. I’m glad that choose gift. Second ,I made a cake
with my mother. It’s very interesting. Then, we sang “happy birthday”. We had a dinner with my grandfather. Finally, we took a photo with my grandfather. It was very happy.
2）Everything for a word, I was very tired but I felt very happy.
7. 语段错误：
1）As is well know. It’s important for us to visit grandparent. I hope we will often visit grandparent.
2）To sum up, I had a wonderful day with my family in last Saturday.