潍坊二模书面表达阅卷总结
要点一：建议他来中国
好词好句：
1. I subscribe to the view that you can come to China to get a job which is of great benefit to you.
2. As far as I’m concerned, it’s a good choice for you to work in China.
3.You asked for my advice about whether you come to China for a job or not .It’s my pleasure to give my suggestions as follows.
典型错误：
1.You said you will come China to find a work .As far as I concerned, work in China is good .My advices are following.
2.I suggest you to come to China.
要点二：阐述理由
1） 就业机会多
好词好句：
1.When it comes to working in China ,there is no doubt that you will have many alternatives .
2.China is a large country where you won’t find it tough to get a job.
典型错误：
1.China is easy to find a work .
2.There have many works for you to chose.
3.The chances to find a job is very large.
2） 专业受欢迎
好词好句：
1,You major in Internet is very popular.
2.You have a good command of English ,which will help a lot in finding a job.
3.What you are majoring in is popular in China, which will benefit you a lot.
典型错误：
1.Your knowledge is popular with China.
2.You learn English is good .
3） 不同的文化体验
好词好句：
1.In terms of developing yourself, you can experience different cultures ,which contributes to broaden your horizons and enrich your knowledge.
2.What is more attractive is that you could enjoy a different culture in China.
典型错误：
1. You can experienced different culture to rich you knowledge.
2.China culture is differ from the England.
要点三：承诺可提供帮助
好词好句：
1.What I’d like to tell you is that I’ll do all I can to help you when you are in trouble.
2.Don’t hesitate to turn to me whenever you get into trouble .
3. Whenever you have trouble in China ,I will spare no efforts to help you out.
典型错误：
1.I promised to help you when you need.
2.I will can try help you if you have trouble.
总体评价
优点：多数作文，要点全，段落结构清晰,让人一看就明确本段写得是哪一个要点。
缺点：1. 部分作文，内容看似充实，但很多句子与题目主题没有太大的联系，特别是要点二阐述理由部分，为什么建议Mike来中国？原因就是与在英国工作相比，在中国工作所具有的的优势，而一些同学用大量篇幅描述中国，这使内容看似充实；
2. 还有一些作文不分段，一段到底，较难辨别要点；
3. 个别还用蓝色笔、铅笔，还有用胶带纸粘的，有用修正带的，有同一字母来回重复画的，这直接造成卷面差；
4. 大小写混乱,特别是在单个的副词或短语之后的单词首字母大写。如：Now, You … ， In my opinion, It …
分要点评价
要点一
好词好句：congratulations.
Congratulate you on your graduation.
The reasons why I advise you to come to China are as follows:
典型错误：as far as you/I concerned,
I heard about you go to China.
I writting you to …
要点二
好词好句：quantities of
There is no doubt that …
As time goes by, …
What’s more, moreover, furthermore, last but not least…
典型错误：at the first
The China is develop quickly. There are many chance/opportunity. You will welcome in China.
You could have different culture experience.
要点三
好词好句：in short
I would appreciate it if you accept my advice.
I will spare no effort to help you.
典型错误：I sure I will help you.
Looking forward your reply.
学生优秀句子
信开头
1. I’m writing to give you some suggestions, which I hope might be of some help to you.
2. I could express my happiness on hear that you intend to work in China.
3. Hearing that you will graduate and decide to seek for a job in China, I feel very delighted. 建议部分
1. In my opinion, it’s a good choice to work in China.
2. Considering you are good at Chinese, I strongly recommend you to find a job in China.
3. You may as well make the best of your qualifications to find a job here.
原因部分
1. Not only will you enrich your knowledge but you will also experience a variety of cultures.
2. There is no doubt that you have an advantage over others in terms of language and knowledge.
3. There being more job opporunities here, you are more likely to find a suitable job.
4. In addition, you will also have the chance to make the aquaintance of the Chinese culture.
5. There is a wide range of jobs to choose from, so it’s not necessary for you do worry about what to do.
帮助祝愿部分
1. If you have difficulty adjusting to the new surroundings, don’t hesitate to turn to me for help.
2. I promise that I will offer help whenever necessary
3. I sincerely hope these suggestions will meet with your approval.
4. All in all, it is beneficial for you to ry a new lifestyle.
5. I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into account.
6. I can give you a hand whenever and wherever you geit into trouble.
高三英语二轮模拟考试作文精彩句式
精彩句式
（一）要点一
1. What puzzled you most is whether you should come to China after your graduation.
2. The reason for this is not far to seek.
3. The reasons are as follows.
4. My suggestion is that you should …
1.As far as I am concerned , It’s a wise decision for you to come to China to find a job.
2.Knowing that you’ll gradute soon , I strongly recommend that you should come to China to find
a job.
(二)要点二
1. With the development of economy, there is no denying that there are a lot of challenges and chances in China, which is of great benefit for you to find a suitable job.
1.Compared to England ,China has more opportunity to hunt for a job,which means that you can
choose what ever you like.
2. It’s what you major in that makes you stand out.
(三)要点三
1. Taking all the factors above into consideration, working in China is really a good choice for you..
2. Tough as it may be when you come to a foreign country, it is worthwhile to do it..
1.I promise to do you a favour when you have difficulty in adapdting to the surroundings.
2.Whenever you get into trouble, don’t hesitate to tell me .I will spare no efforts to help you. 典型错误：
1. suggest 后的宾从没有用虚拟语气。
2.advise/advice 词性分不开，并且advice是不可数名词的特点没有掌握。
3. look forward to doing 使用错误
4. chances 拼写错误，拼写成了changes
5. writing 拼写错误
6. major in 使用错误
一、问题：
1. 词性不分：different与difference
2. 名词混用：major与majority
3. 介词省略：look forward to的to
4. 固定词组误用：look forward to doing 用成look forward to do
5. 首行未缩进
二、优美句子
要点一：1.As far as I am concerned , It’s a wise decision for you to come to China to find a job.
2.Knowing that you’ll gradute soon , I strongly recommend that you should come to
China to find a job.
要点二：1.Compared to England ,China has more opportunity to hunt for a job,which means that
you can choose what ever you like.