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1.流行时尚
In modern society, fashion is becoming more highly valued in people's choice of clothes. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
It seems that in recent years more and more people, especially in urban areas, are dressing more stylishly. Nowadays it is not uncommon to see people walking around in brand name clothes and sunglasses like celebrities. But why is this happening and is it a positive development?
The cause of this fashion obsession surely is connected to movies and pop culture. In today’s society, we are constantly seeing images of attractive movies stars and MTV videos with pop icons wearing the most recent styles. To some extent, and perhaps even subconsciously, this affects our own behaviour as we imitate what we see.
One on level, being fashionable is quite healthy. It is natural for us to want to look good, because if we look good we feel good about ourselves. Especially in today’s world of work and relationships, it’s important to have good self-esteem and be confident. Looking good can help us achieve that.
But from another angle, being too fashion-conscious has its problems. Sometimes people end up obsessing about buying the most expensive things and look down upon
others who can’t afford them. Such people become superficial and often don’t pay enough attention to the important things in life, like friendship and being a good person.
So in the end, each person has to find the right balance regarding how fashionable to be. There is nothing wrong with looking good and feeling good; in fact it’s human. But we must also be sure not to dwell on it so much.
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Harvey点评：
写作线索：首段，引出现象并表态；第二段，问答第一个问题why；第三段，positive；第四段；negative。末段总结。
本文清新自然，没有大道理，很多小常识。比如第三段第二句：It is natural for us to want to look good, because if we look good we feel good about ourselves. 好作文不是高难词汇的堆砌。最简单的词汇也可以直指人心，赢得读者共鸣。
先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用
词汇
stylishly adv.时髦地
celebrity n.名人，名流
obsession n.迷住，迷恋
pop adj.流行的，通俗的
icon n. 偶像，图标
subconsciously adv.下意识地
imitate v.模仿
fashionable adj.流行的，时髦的
self-esteem n.自尊
superficial adj.肤浅的
短语
depend on取决于
be connected to 和…有联系
to some extent 某种程度上
from another angle从另一方面看
look down upon 瞧不起
pay attention to 关注
dwell on 仔细研究
三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子
? Nowadays it is not uncommon to see people walking around in brand name
clothes and sunglasses like celebrities.
? Personally I feel that whether it’s good or bad depends on the individual’s
attitude.
Especially in today’s world of work and relationships, it’s important to have good self-esteem and be confident. ?
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儿童类雅思作文高分范文及点评
——摘自刘洪波20##新作《最简化雅思写作》
Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In recent years parents have had to make tough decisions about how much time their kids should spend watching TV and playing computer or video games. Some have argued that they are not only a waste of time, but potentially harmful. Others, however, claim that kids should be kids and deserve some entertainment. Personally, I feel that the best approach is moderation.
On the one hand, too much TV and gaming can have a negative influence. Physically, hours in front of a monitor are harmful on the eyes. And mentally if kids spend too much time living in a virtual world, they may lose the ability to make friends and socialize in a normal way. Moreover, seeing too much violence and questionable content could influence young people’s behavior, as they are impressionable.
On the other hand, all children need to have fun and play. If students only study, they will surely suffer from mental and emotional pressure and stress. Also, not all content on TV or online is unhealthy; there are lots of educational shows and content that is positive.
Speaking from personal experience, I think the right approach is to have a healthy balance. In this regard, parents have a responsibility to set boundaries and make sure that the content their kids are viewing is appropriate. As well, TV and video games are not the only ways to have fun, so parents should encourage their kids to interact and play with other kids in person too.
In the end, we should follow our common sense. Parents should be firm but fair with letting their kids play online or in front of a TV screen. Most things in moderation are healthy, and TV and video games are no different.
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刘洪波点评：
写作线索：观点中立，适度即可。第二段on the one hand，讲负面；第三段on the other hand，讲正面；最后讲家长要重视和起作用。
经典的中立型文章。可学习的点很多：首先，首段最后一句中The best approach is moderation.（最好的办法是适度）moderation一词可以理解为中文的“（把握）火候”，是中立文章的点睛大词，不可不学。其次，第二段中分别用physically和mentally拓展了写作思路；最后，文章末句提升至哲学高度：Most things in moderation are healthy, TV and video games are no different.（大多数事情适度都是好的，电视和视频游戏也不例外）是啊，适度饮酒对身体好；打打小麻将，买买彩票还怡情呢。但最难把握的就是这个moderation“度”啊！
先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用
点睛词汇
deserve [di5zE:v] vt. 应受，值得
moderation [7mCdE5reiFEn] n. 适度
socialize [5sEuFElaiz] v. 社会交往
virtual [5vE:tjuEl, -tFuEl] adj. 虚拟的
questionable [5kwestFEnEb(E)l] adj. 有问题的
interact [7intEr5Akt] vi. 互相作用，互相影响
firm [fE:m] adj. 严格的
必备短语
make decision 作出决定
spend sometime (in) doing sth. /spend sometime on sth. 花时间在（做）某事上
have a negative influence有不良影响
be harmful to/on sth. 对……有伤害
make friends交朋友
suffer from遭受
in this regard在这点上
have a responsibility to do sth. 有责任去做某事
set boundaries限制
in person亲自
三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子
l And mentally if kids spend too much time living in a virtual world, they may lose the ability to make friends and socialize in a normal way.
l As well, TV and video games are not the only ways to have fun, so parents should encourage their kids to interact and play with other kids in person too.
l Most things in moderation are healthy, and TV and video games are no different.