雅思教父刘洪波：旅游类雅思作文高分范文及点评
雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品
《最简化雅思写作》
8月光芒上市
从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想
完全应对官方四大评分标准
最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板
涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文
幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分
中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐
1. 旅游
International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?
Air travel combined with early retirement and people with money to spend has meant that more and more people can travel the world. Some countries, especially those with famous historical sights and beautiful natural scenery try to attract this large market. While there are some problems that can be caused with all this travel, generally it is a positive thing.
Firstly, consider that all these tourists mean money that governments are eager to tap into. For many countries, tourism is a big part of GDP and without it their economies would suffer. Foreign tourists bring important dollars to the service industry and lots of small shops and vendors.
Secondly, by encouraging tourism governments are promoting their cities and countries. In my country, China, for example, increased tourism and hosting the Olympics has changed people’s perception of our country. At the same time, tourism allows local people to gain exposure to people from other countries, which is also a good thing.
Of course it’s not always a perfect picture. Not all tourists have a good attitude and manners. And in some cases they may even have a negative influence on the local population. But these situations are not so common, and embassies can create tough guidelines for getting a visa. This seems like a reasonable compromise.
To conclude, international travel is a great thing, but it is a privilege that should not be abused. Governments should encourage it, but also put in place measures to keep
dangerous people away. This will result in a win-win situation for everyone.
(251 words)
Harvey点评：
写作线索：首段，国际旅游利大于弊；第二段，刺激本国经济；第三段，加深双方了解；第四段；不利之处。末段总结。
本文我们看到加汉老师是以一位中国学生的口吻写出来。他曾告诉我他的中文名字有两个含义：加拿大的男子汉；加入汉族。
第四段的观点比较抽象，其实针对国际旅游的弊端，我们可以谈对旅游资源的过度开发；旅游景点的环保压力；对当地居民生活方式的影响；经济过渡依赖于旅游业的后果等等。
如果我写这篇文章，国际旅游的好处第一条我就说：“许多人类的文明古迹虽然是某个国家拥有的，其实也是全人类的财富。比如长城、金字塔。应该让全世界的人去参观、欣赏和尊重”。先上升到一个全人类的高度，凸显大气。大部分考生不是写不出来，主要是想不到。思想有多高，作为分数就有多高。
先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用
词汇
Retirement n.退休
Tourism n. 旅游业
Vendor n.卖主，小贩
promote vt.促进，推广
host vt. 主办
perception n.观念，理解
embassy n.大使馆
guideline n.指导方针
compromise n.妥协，折衷
privilege n.特权
abuse v.滥用
短语
famous historical sights 历史名胜
beautiful natural scenery 美丽的自然风光
be eager to渴望
tap into 利用
in some cases在有些情况下
have a negative influence on对…有负面影响
win-win situation 双赢局面
三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子
? Some countries, especially those with famous historical sights and beautiful
natural scenery try to attract this large market.
Secondly, by encouraging tourism governments are promoting their cities and countries.
This will result in a win-win situation for everyone. ? ?
第二篇：雅思教父刘洪波：建筑类雅思作文高分范文及点评
雅思教父刘洪波：建筑类雅思作文高分范文及点评
雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品
《最简化雅思写作》
8月光芒上市
从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想
完全应对官方四大评分标准
最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板
涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文
幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分
中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐
1. 建筑风格
Modern buildings are appearing in large numbers but some people believe that we should build our buildings in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, an interesting trend has emerged. Countries with long histories and rich cultures have been modernizing the quickest, especially in terms of architecture. Many have criticized this as not respecting traditional culture. While traditional architecture should be protected, however, I feel it is not necessary to stop building modern structures as we move forward.
One reason for this is that modern buildings are more practical and comfortable to live and work in. While traditional buildings might look nice from the outside, they are often not very user-friendly. Modern buildings usually have lots of windows and light and are clean and energy efficient. Surely this will make those inside them happier.
Another point to consider is that modern buildings will give a good impression to those visiting from abroad. Consider Beijing during the Olympics, for example. Many foreigners were surprised to see all of the stunning new building designs. In the long run, this will probably attract more business and tourists to the country.
Of course, traditional architecture still has its value. Everyone loves visiting famous historical places and admiring architectural styles from throughout history. We should protect and appreciate such places for future generations, but at the same time, we don’t have to live in the past.
Ultimately, each city needs to find its own balance between “old” and “new” when it
comes to building styles, but modern buildings are for sure a positive thing. After all, if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to let future generations know what our period of history was like.
(264 words)
Harvey点评：
写作线索：首段，现代建筑必要；第二段，因为现代建筑的实用性和舒适性；
第三段，代表城市现代化；第四段；让步，传统建筑的价值。末段总结。
文中第三段的观点不够有力。其实现代建筑的优点直接分实用性和舒适性两个段落来重点阐述即可。比如实用性，现代化都市人口密度比以前大，摩天大楼skyscraper提高了城市土地的使用效率。
本文末句很有趣味，再仔细读读：After all, if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to let future generations know what our period of history was like.（毕竟，如果我们不继续开发新建筑的风格，我们的下一代将不会知道我们这一代的历史是什么样）历史是相对的，对于我们的子孙来说，我们现在的现代化建筑将成为他们眼里的古代建筑。
先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用
词汇
emerge vi.显现出来
architecture n.建筑物
practical adj.实用的
user-friendly adj.用户友好的，方便用户使用的
stunning adj.足以使人晕倒的，极好的
admire v.赞美，钦佩，羡慕
ultimately adv.最后,
短语
in terms of在...方面
move forward前进
in the long run从长远看
for sure确实
after all 毕竟
let sb. do sth. 让某人做某事
三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子
? In recent years, an interesting trend has emerged.
? One reason for this is that modern buildings are more practical and comfortable
to live and work in.
? After all, if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to
let future generations know what our period of history was like.