【戴蒙·语文】语文老师倾心整理:优秀作文的方法总结,写作文就是这么简单!(适合3-6年级) 2015-12-15
导读:我小时写作文,总是写不出,每次写完了一数,字数不够,就凑字数,在后面加上“啊,我今天上学了,真高兴啊!”,数数还不够,就继续凑“我从小到大从来没这么高兴过,上学是一件多高兴的事啊!”反正写来写去就是为了凑。
其实,很多孩子在进入三年级之后在写作文时都会遇到困惑,但是从今天起有了这十条写作文的方法,家长再也不用担心孩子的作文啦!快和颜老师一起来看一看吧!
一、写外貌不用“有”
作文如何写外貌?孩子的作文里总会看到类似这样的名子:“XX可漂亮了,她有一头卷卷的黄头发,有一双乌黑的葡萄般的大眼睛,有一个高高的鼻子,还有一张樱桃小嘴。”
如果你试着让他们去掉文中的“有”,把文字重新串联一遍,会发现作文顺了很多。写上段文字的同学经三好网蒋老师指导后修改如下:“XX可漂亮啦。一头卷卷的黄头发自然地披在肩上。她的眼睛太吸引人了,乌黑乌黑葡萄一般。高高的鼻子,和樱桃小嘴配合起来,有点混血的味道,同学们可喜欢她啦。”是不是读起来舒服多了?
二、写说不单写“说”
让孩子比较以下三句话。
张三说:“??”;
张三无可奈何地说:“??”;
张三摊了摊手,一副无可奈何的样子:“??”
显然,让人物说话有多种方式,写语言可以不用出现“说”而是在语言前面加上动作和神态,通过一定的训练掌握这样的技巧让孩子的写作水平切实得到提升,让他们学会细节描写,不会仅干巴巴的地写“某某说”。
三、写想不出现“想”
遇到描写心理活动时,这样的句子已经被孩子们写滥:“我脑子里跳出两个小人,一个小人??另一个小人??”不用这个句子又该怎么写?最常用的就是“我心想”。如某学生写: “数学老师出了一道难题要带回家写的。我心想:天哪!这该怎么办呢?”
按照蒋老师“写想不用想”的技巧,去掉:“我心想”三个字如何?“数学老师出了一道难题要带回家写的。天哪!这该怎么办呢?”是不是更简洁精练?别忘了提醒孩子要给心理描写加上适当感叹词。
四、不用成语
作文为什么写不长?都是成语惹的祸!蒋老师此言一出震惊四座。不是说多用成语才显得有文采吗?其实不然,在“就是不用成语”写作技巧中,蒋老师指出:当作文中只会按照套路使用成语时,文章细节就没了,还不如让孩子老老实实把自己看到的感受都写出来。什么天高云淡、风和日丽、桃红柳绿、炯炯有神、心旷神怡??这些被用滥的成语还是少出现为妙。
比如,写春天别用“风和日丽”,而是这样写:“风儿拂过林梢,原本平静的湖面漾起了圈圈涟漪,湖边的柳树轻摇着身姿,我也忍不住张开双臂,任风抚过我的每一寸肌肤,暖暖的,痒痒的。”想办法用具体的句子替换掉别人用滥的成语,解决孩子作文写不长写不细的难题。
五、遇到“很”和“非常”想一想
对于文章写不长的孩子,可以训练的另一个技巧是:遇到“很”和“非常”想一想。看过无数学生习作,三号网蒋老师发现出现频率最高的字眼包括“很,非常”,请家长提醒孩子,遇到要写这几个字时不要轻易下笔,停下来想一想,是不是非要出现这个字眼?
比如写热,别出现“很热”两个字,学会用其他的描写来体现热:骄阳似火,没有一丝风,树叶低垂毫无生气??文章自然就能写长。
六、环境里面有“真”“情”
到了五六年级孩子都要学习环境描写。如有的孩子会写:“早上天气还挺好的,放学回家时,却哗哗下起雨来。雨珠在下,泪珠在滴,老天也好像在为我哭泣。”
孩子能用环境衬托自己的心情首先要表扬。但是很多孩子只要一写环境,肯定就是小花微笑,小草点头、小鸟歌唱、小雨哭泣,成了套路,难道世界上只有小草、小鸟、小花吗?为什么不能写身边更真实的东西呢?云、雾、桌子,哪怕是电线杆都可以写,这个技巧是提醒孩子不仅要让人活在环境里,还要让人活在真实的环境里。
七、要动连着动
文章要一波三折才好看,但现在的孩子生活都很平淡,你不能强求他们写出一波三折的内容,那就让他们学会一波三折地使用动词,就这是要动连着动——学会连续使用动词。某学生写一场乒乓球球赛:“他发了一个旋转球,让人看得眼花缭乱。”(一句话把文章就给写完了)
学会动词技巧后将修改成:“只见他高高地将球抛起,眼睛死死盯着,球接触球板的一瞬间,他手腕轻轻一抖,脚一跺,球高速旋转着,向这边飞来,让人看得眼花缭乱。”一个动词转瞬变成六七个,文字即刻灵动丰富起来。
八、一秒钟的事写三百字
还是针对作文写不长的一种技巧训练:用三百字来描写1秒钟内发生的事。如关于破校运会跳高纪录瞬间的描写原本只有几十字:只见某某纵身一跳,一下子飞过横杆,新的校运会纪录诞生了!
怎么变成三百字?可以有条理地加上动作解剖:如何助跑、起跳、翻越、落地;加上联想:往届校运会有人挑战失败,平时如何一次次练习等等;还可以加上细节来充实,起跳前如何与同学们进行眼神交流,成功后同学如何向他祝贺??家长可以找一些1秒钟的素材让孩子进行写作练习,学会了这个技巧还怕考试写不出四五百字吗?
九、一段话里至少出现6个标点
很多孩子不会用标点,习作中常只有逗号句号逗号句号,甚至逗号都没有,把老师读到断气为止。针对这个现象,可以让孩子进行“一段话至少出现6种标点”的技巧训练。比如,。?!??:“”
这些标点你的作文中都有吗?没有的话请尝试用起来。经过几次训练后,你会发现孩子的惊人变化:意味深长的句子会写了、人物语言会加进去了,心理活动结合进去了,还会用反问句了,这些句子加进去后,文章当然生动起来。一位作家就曾用这种方法对自己作文写不好的孩子进行训练,收效明显,进步很快。
十、字数三四五
这个技巧说白了就是学习写短句。学了一段时间写作的孩子容易在作文中写长句,而长句写不好就变成病句。事实上很多作家也是以写短句见长的,像沈从文、汪曾祺。家长要提醒孩子注意控制每句话的字数,建议把十几个字几十个字的长句改成只有三四五个字的短句,孩子们会发现这样的作文有语感会舒服很多。
如某学生的原文:“高高的绿绿的草散发着诱人的清香。一根一根都看得那么清楚,很挺拔的样子。”经指导后改成:“草绿了,高了,散发着清香。一根一根,看得清清楚楚,很挺拔的样子。”是不是很有节奏感?
戴蒙教育资深语文老师张亚楠认为,孩子学习写作一般要走过4个阶段:1、写作并不神秘;
2、写作需要技巧;3、写作强调个性;4、写作就是生活。一些孩子在大量读写中,在老师的帮助下会顺利走到第三阶段,甚至第四阶段;但是也有很大一批孩子无法跨越第二阶段。
传授的技巧就是针对这些部分孩子。家长完全可以在家里运用以上技巧对孩子进行有针对性的训练。而对于那些已经走到第三、第四阶段的孩子,爸爸妈妈需要做的就是保证他们大量的阅读,鼓励他们的个性创作。
第二篇:四六级考试优秀作文的方法总结
Chapter One 文章开头句型
1-1 对立法 : 先引出其他人的不同看法,然后提出自己的看法或者偏向于某一看法, 适用于有争议性的主题.
例如(e.g)
[1]. When asked about....., the vast/overwhelming majority of people say that ....... But I think/view a bit differently.
[2]. When it comes to .... , some people bielive that ....... Others argue/claim that the opposite/reverse is true . There is probably some truth in both arguements/statements , but (I tend to the profer/latter ...)
[3]. Now, it is commonly/generally/widely believed/held/acknowledged that .... They claim/ believe/argue that ... But I wonder/doubt whether.....
1-2 现象法 引出要剖析的现象或者问题, 然后评论 .
e.g
[1]. Recently the rise in problem of/(phenomenon of) ... has cause/aroused public/popular/wide/ worldwide concern.
[2]. Recently the issue of the problem of/the phenomenon of ...has been brought into focus. ( has been brought to public attention)
[3].Inflation/Corruption/Social inequality ... is yet another of the new and bitter truth we have to learn to face now/constantly.
----- To be continued !!
1-3 观点法 ----开门见山,直接了当地提出自己对要讨论的问题的看法.
e.g:
[1]. Never history has the change of .. been as evident as ... Nowhere in the world/China has the issue/idea of .. benn more visible/popular than...
[2]. Now people in growing/significant numbers are beginnig/coming to realize/accept/(be aware) that...
[3]. Now there is a growing awareness/recognation ot the necessity to......Now people become increasingly aware/conscious of the importance of ......
[4]. Perhaps it is time to have a fresh look at the attitude/idea that.......
1-4 引用法 ----- 先引出名人名言或者有代表性的看法, 来引出文章要展开论述的观点! e.g:
[1]. "Knowledge is power." such is the remark made by Bacon.This remark has been shared by more and more people .
"Education is not complete with gradulation." Such is the opnion of a great American philosopher. Now more and more people share his opnion.
[2]."........." How often we hear such statements/words like thoses /this .
In our own days we are used to hearing such traditional complains as this "......".
1-5 比较法 ------ 通过对过去,现在 两种不同的倾向,观点的比较 , 引出文章要讨论的观点. e.g:
[1]. For years, ...had been viewed as ... But people are taking a fresh look now. With the growing ... , people ....... .
[2]. People used to think that ... (In the past, ....) But people now share this new.
1-6 故事法 ---- 先讲一个较短的故事来引发读者的兴趣, 引出文章的主题.
e.g:
[1]. Once in (a newspaper) , I read of/learnt .... The phenemenon of ... has aroused public concern.
[2]. I have a friend who ... Should he .... ? Such a dilemma we are often confront with in our daily life.
[3]. Once upon a time , there lived a man who ... This story may be (unbelievable) , but it still has a realistic significance now.
1-8 问题法 ----- 先用讨论或解答的设问, 引出自己观点, 适用于有争议性的话题.
e.g:
Should/What ...... ? Options of ... vary greatly , some ..., others ...
But in my opinion , ...... .
Chapter 2 文章中间主体内容句型
原因结果分析
3-1-1. 基本原因 --- 分析某事物时, 用此句型说明其基本的或者多方面的原因.
e.g:
[1]. Why ... ? For one thing.. For another ...
[2]. The answer to this problem invovles many factors. For one thing... For another...... Still another ...
[3]. A number of factors , both physical and psychological affect .... /both individual and social contribute to ....
3-1-2 另一原因 --------> 在分析了基本原因之后, 再补充一个次要的或者更重要时用! e.g:
[1]. Another important factor is ....
[2]. ... is also responsible for the change/problem.
[3]. Certainly , the ... is not the sole reason for .....
3-1-3 后果影响 --------- 分析某事物可能造成的后果或者带来的影响 .
e.g:
[1]. It will produce a profound/far-reaching effect/impact on....
[2]. In involves some serious consequence for ........
比较对照句型
3-2-1. 两者比较 ---> 比较两事物, 要说出其一超过另一个, 或肯定一事物的优点, 也肯定其缺点的时候用 !
e.g:
[1]. The advantages gained from A are much greater than the advantages we gain from B.
[2]. Indeed, A carries much weight when compared with B.
[3]. There is no doubt that it has its negative effects as well as positive effects.
3-2-2 . 两者相同/相似 ------> 比较两事物共同都有或者共同都没有的特点时用!
e.g:
[1]. A and B have several thing in common. They are similar in that.....
[2]. A bears some sriking resemblance(s) to B.
Chapter Three 文章结尾形式
2-1 结论性--------- 通过对文章前面的讨论 ,引出或重申文章的中心思想及观点 .
e.g:
[1]. From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that .....
[2]. In summary/In a word , it is more valuable .......
2-2 后果性------ 揭示所讨论的问题若不解决, 将产生的严重后果.
e.g:
[1]. We must call for an immediate method , because the current phenomenon of ... , if allowed to proceed, will surely lead to the heavy cost of .......
[2]. Obviously , if we ignore/are blind to the problem , there is every chance that .. will be put in danger.
2-3 号召性 -------- 呼吁读者行动起来, 采取行动或提请注意.
e.g:
[1]. It is time that we urged an immediate end to the undesirable tendcy of ......
[2]. It is essential thar effective measures should be taken to correct the tendency.
2-4 建议性 -------- 对所讨论的问题提出建议性的意见, 包括建议和具体的解决问题的方法. e.g:
[1]. While it cannot be solved immediately, still there are ways. The most popular is .... Another method is ... Still another one is .....
[2]. Awareness/Recognition of the problem is the first step toward the situation.
2-5 方向性的结尾方式 ---- 其与建议性的唯一差别就是对问题解决提出总的, 大体的方向或者指明前景.
e.g:
[1]. Many solutions are being offered here , all of them make some sense, but none is adequate enough. The problem should be recognized in a wide way .
[2]. There is no quick method to the issue of .., but .. might be helpful/benefical.
[3]. The great challenge today is ...... There is much difficulty , but ........
2--6 意义性的结尾方式 --------> 文章结尾的时候,从更高的更新的角度指出所讨论的问题的重要性以及其深远的意义!
e.g:
[1]. Following these suggestions may not guarantee the success, but the pay off might be worth the effort . It will not only benefit but also benefit .....
[2]. In any case, whether it is posotive or negative, one thing is certain that it will undoubtedly ..