范文赏析

时间:2024.5.2

In recent years, extravagance and waste have

become increasingly serious in some of the university campus. We can see that papers, bottles and cans are thrown away after use; food is wasted just because of its poor taste; clothes are discarded simply owing to their old fashion. As a consequence, people in mounting numbersput great emphasis on creating a green campus. There are at least two criteria to distinguish what is green campus. On the one hand, natural resources must be conserved and made full use of, for example, we, as college students, should take the wise use of papers and second-hand textbooks into account. On the other hand, education to build up thrift habits must be promoted by relevant departments and professionals at various levels.

Accordingly, it is necessary for us to take effective steps. For one thing, university authorities should respond with the demand for more rigid conservation of our natural resources, such as water, electricity, and so on. For another, we should enhance the awareness of college students that creating a green campus is of utmost significance to both our society and ourselves.

It is of great importance to make and maintain a green campus in our university or college. Obviously, a growing number of people are beginning to realize that it is our duty to do that in the present days, since the concept of “a green world” has become the focus of the society.

The idea of “a green campus” is beyond a green environment. To begin with, the development on the campus is to be sustainable and recyclable. Some of the authorities’ budget should be on how to reduce of the waste. What’s more, we’d better be aware of the seriousness of pollution around us. Thus the idea of environmental protection may become a common occurrence in our daily life.

It is necessary that effective actions should be taken to protect our campus from waste and pollution, and hence these activities are to play an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life. Certainly, there is little doubt that further consideration must be paid to our green campuses.


第二篇:记叙文范文赏析


范文分析

Directions: Now you are allowed thirty minutes to write a passage on the title My Best Friend. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words following the outline given below in Chinese:

1.简要介绍你最好的朋友。

2.你们之间的故事。

3.你对朋友的理解。

范文: My Best Friend

Upon the words “best friend”, a figure Jumps into my mind (jump这个词使一个人物形象活灵活现地展现在读者眼前) —Zhang Ye—my schoolmate in senior high school and also my best friend. During the three years in high school, we shared countless moments of laughter and tears, joy and sorrow. (排比句式能使表达更有力度,而且将与朋友的共同经历描绘得丰富多彩)

She is of medium height and slim figure. Though not strong, she is really a girl with amazing stamina(毅力). Despite the similarities in our outlook on life and living, it is always she, the physically weaker one, who encouraged and urged me to finish some tasks when I attempted to give up. When we were preparing for the National Entrance Exam, she cheered me up emotionally and would give me a hand whenever I was in trouble. But for everything she did for me, I couldn’t have had this opportunity to get a decent job with a decent pay. After the exam, she got enrolled by Tsinghua University in Beijing while I went to a college in south China. (对3年中两人共同勉励、共同奋斗经历的叙述为读者展示了一段难忘的人生时光,确实不愧为best friend) For the past several years, we have been in touch and share everything we are experiencing, sad or happy, dull or exciting.

True friendship lasts life long. Friendship is a magic. It can melt the ice in one’s heart and blow away the mist on one’s mind. It can inspire others and outdo the self. (再次应用排比句式表达了对友谊真谛的理解,感人至深) I believe the friendship between Zhang Ye and me will be the life-time beacon for both of us.

评析: 这是一篇典型的人物记叙文。大多数人物记叙文都遵循一个比较固定的写作套路,即:第一段叙述文中人物与作者的关系,并对人物进行综合评价; 第二段叙述文中人物其个人或与作者共同的某段经历、活动;第三段进行综合叙述。

本文的第一段总体叙述了两个人相识相知的经历并用一个排比结构总括了两人共同经历的苦与乐、欢笑与泪水( laughter and tears,joy and sorrow)。第二段通过对具体事例的叙述将人物的性格特点表现得淋漓尽致,也丰富了best friend这个称谓的具体内涵。最后一段作者陈述了自己对友谊真谛的感悟,使文章的主题得到升华。而其中所使用的句式和词汇(melt the ice in one’s heart; blow away the mist on one’s mind; inspire others and outdo the self)也展示了作者深厚的语言功底。

叙事记叙文参考模版

记叙文范文赏析

记叙文范文赏析

例文1:

题目: An Eye-witness Account of a Traffic Accident

Directions: for this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic An Eye-witness Account of a Traffic Accident. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline given below:

1) 车祸发生的时间及地点

2) 你所见到的车祸情况

记叙文范文赏析

3) 你对车祸原因的分析

Sample A:

记叙文范文赏析

Sample B: It was at about 9:00 on Sunday morning, when I went out of the campus to go to a supermarket for a shopping. I was walking leisurely on the sidewalk of Xueyuang Road when I heard a loud crash just at the cross about 10 meters away. Two cars crashed together. It was a serious traffic accident.

Lots of people rushed to the spot to see what had happened, me included. I found two cars were badly damaged with a door knocked off. One driver was blooding on his forehead and another was shut in the taxi. Some people were trying to help the driver get out of the damaged car; others were calling 110 and 120 for help. At that time a lot of cars were jammed on the road.

It is obvious that two drivers were driving too fast. What's worse, they are all trying to pass the cross at the last moment with the yellow light on. Certainly, the accident is inevitable. But if all of the drivers obey the traffic rules and remember the slogan everywhere on the street that says "a little slower, a little safer", everything will be OK. Therefore, please keep in your mind, taking care of other's lives means taking care of your own life.

Sample C: When I was going back home from college at four o'clock in the afternoon last Friday, June 13th, 2003, I witnessed a terrible car accident. The accident took place on the Nanjing Road.

As far as I could remember, I was walking on the pavement and a blue Santana swiftly passed by. When it approached a truck parked on the roadside, suddenly, a girl stepped out from behind the truck. On seeing the girl, the car driver pulled a sudden brake. However it was too late. The girl was hit by the car and bounced off at least three meters. Then she lay on the road, her legs were seemingly injured. The police and the ambulance arrived in less than five minutes and the girl was sent to hospital immediately.

That is all I had seen.To me the main cause of the accident might be like this: The girl was just about to walk to the other side of the road when the car moved near. She should have seen the approaching danger. Unfortunately, her view was blocked by the huge vehicle, which eventually led to the tragedy.

例文2

A Special Social Practice

1. Everyone has an unforgettable memory and cannot remove it. 2. To me, it happened ②

4. It was a sunny day and things were awfully ⑧talking happily about a great success of a project. 7. It did not last very long, but it impressed me so deeply that I would

8.Whenever I look back on what happened that day, I think it is right to First of all, no one can deny its to

一对外发行的英文报纸有“人物剪影”栏目,请根据下面的提示写一篇短文,介绍我国著名乒乓球运动员王楠。

提示:

1. 王楠:19xx年10月出生于辽宁。

2. 身高1.62米,体重54公斤。

3. 7岁开始打球,19xx年进入辽宁队,19xx年入选国家队。

4. 训练刻苦,与队友相处融洽。

5. 喜欢上网,交友。网址:wangnan@wang-nan.net.

6. 在国际比赛中获得几十枚金牌,为国家争得了荣誉。

注意:

1. 题目自拟;

2. 不要逐条翻译提示,可适当增加细节,使短文连贯。

3. 词数100~140 Wang Nan-World Champion in Ping pong

Wang Nan,a world champion in Ping Pong,is 1.62 meter tall with the weight of 54 kilograms. She was born in Liaoning Province in October 1978. She began to play ping pong at the age of seven. She worked in Liaoning Team for three years before she came to the national team in 1993. She trained hard and got along well with her teammates. Wang Nan has won scores of gold medals in international table-tennis games and won great hon-or for our motherland. She likes going on the net and she enjoys chatting with friends thr-ough the Internet. You can find more information about her at Wangnan@wang-nan net.

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic My Most Favorite Programmer. You should write no less than 100 words and you should base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:

1.我最喜爱的电视(或无线电)节目是……

2.这类节目的内容和特点

3.我喜欢它的原因

My Most Favorite Programmer

The News Report has always been my favorite TV program. Almost everyday I turn on the TV at 6:30 p.m. and wait for the news program. This has become a part of my life.

The News Report contains a large amount of information C from the international political. situation to the latest foot-ball game. And the most important character is its fast pace. Because of this fast pace, news programs can contain much information in a short time. In my opinion, the News Report is more than a TV program. It is a way of communication. From this program, people can know and understand world affairs. The world thus becomes smaller. I especially appreciate this benefit of watching the news.

今天是教师节,请根据以下提示写一篇记叙你的英语老师的短文,约220词左右。

1. 李老师教课生动活泼,印象深刻。

2. 上课前班长通知说李老师要动手术,暂时不能来上课,谁能代课还未决定。

3. 同学们悄然无声,似乎都担心她不再来上课了。

4. 李老师走进教室,她说不愿意耽误同学们的功课,要求医生推迟了手术时间。并说新老师明天就来,希望同学们同老师很好地相处,她病愈即返校。

Miss Li is our English teacher. She always impresses us deeply with her lively English class.

One day when the first bell rang, the monitor stood up and said, “Our English teacher is going to have an operation today. It has not been decided yet who will give us the lesson. ”The class turned silent at his words. It seemed that no one would believe him. In fact, all of us were afraid that Miss Li would no longer be with us. At this moment, Miss Li appeared at the door. She looked tired and pale.

“I’ll be missing you badly,”she said in a low voice,“I have asked the doctor to put off the operation till tomorrow because I don’t want you to miss a single class. ”She went on, “A new teacher will take my place and I hope you’ll get on well with him. I’ll come back as soon as I’m better. ”

Hearing this,all of us were moved to tears. What a good teacher we have.

常用句式及常用表达

1. 表示时间

after, after a short (long ) time (period), afterwards, as soon as, at last, finally, from that time on,

immediately, lately, nowadays, recently, shortly, since, since then, then, when, while

2. 表示因果

accordingly, as a result (consequence), consequently, hence, so, therefore, thus

3. 平行结构(排比结构)

这种结构的使用可以使行文生动、简洁、紧凑,富有节奏感。

(1) 有些排比结构是通过连词来实现的。

and, but, or, neither... nor, either... or, not only... but also, both.. .and. . .

as well as

(2) 但更多的情况下这种结构是通过词性(均为名词、动词、形容词等)、词形 (均为分词形式等) 和词组结构 (均为不定式、从句、介词词组 等) 的一致与对应实现的。

以下是5个排比结构:

1) My mother’s role in my family is washing, cleaning and taking care of her children.

2) Studies serve for delight, for ornament, and for ability.

学习足以怡情、足以博采、足以长才。

3) The American girl impressed is as sweet, kind and generous.

4) Jeff has experienced a period of anxiety for isolation from parents when he first went to the

kindergarten, when he first attended a lodging school and when he first went to college in another city.

杰夫第一次去幼儿园、第一次住校读书、第一次到另外一个城市去读大学时,都经历了与父母分离而产生的焦虑时期。

5) Never had Brent seen such chaos as during the earthquake: windows of storefronts were

shattering, streets were splitting open, bricks and boulders were crashing down from tall buildings on the people below.

布伦特从未见过像这次地震中这样混乱的场面:商店橱窗的玻璃被震得粉碎;街道路面崩裂了;高楼上还有砖头瓦块坠落,砸向下面的人们。

记叙文中常用谚语、格言(以字母为序)

1. A friend to everybody is a friend to nobody.

人人是朋友,没有真朋友。

2. A good book is a best friend who never turns his back upon you.

好书如挚友,永远不相负。

3. A good example is the best sermon.

身教重于言教。

4. A good fame is better than a good name.

美名胜于美貌。

5. All roads lead to Rome.

条条大陆通罗马。

6. All time is no time when it is past.

时间一去不复返。

7. All things are difficult before they are easy.

万事开头难。

8. Actions speak louder than word.

事实胜于雄辩。

9. A young idler, an old beggar.

少壮不努力,老大徒伤悲。

10. Caution is the parent of safety.

小心驶得万年船。

11. Fine feature makes fine birds.

人靠衣装,马靠鞍装。

12. Friendship is both a source of pleasure and a component of good health.

友谊既是快乐的源泉,又是健康的源泉。

13. Good company on the road is the shortest cut.

行路有良伴就是捷径。

14. Good advice is beyond all price.

忠告是无价之宝。

15. Love me little, love me long.

爱不贵深,而贵久。

16. Many hands make light work.

人多力量大。

17. Never do things by halves.

不要半途而废。

18. Nothing is impossible for a willing person.

苍天不负有心人。

19. No cross, no crown.

不经历风雨,不能见彩虹。

20. One lie makes many.

一次说谎,百次圆谎。

21. Time tries all.

路遥知马力,日久见人心。

22. Two heads are better than one.

三个臭皮匠,顶个诸葛亮。

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