丝路教育2014高考英语天津卷满分作文夏继超

第二节： 书面表达（满分25分）

假设你是阳光中学高一(5)班的班长李华，得知英国学生Tom 作为交换生， 下学期将到你班学习。请你根据以下提示，给他写封邮件：

（1） 表示欢迎

（2） 介绍个人与本班情况

（3） 介绍与本地生活相关的信息（如天气， 饮食等）

（4） 希望Tom做哪些事情， 以增进中英学生之间的了解和友谊

参考词汇：

交换生 exchange student

Dear Chris,

I’m Li Jin, monitor of Class One, Grade Eleven. I have heard that you are to come to our school as exchange students, and I, on behalf of our class, welcome you warmly and sincerely. Now, I’d like to introduce some details about the weather, food, and our class.

The weather in fall is very pleasant. It is neither too hot nor too cold, and neither too dry nor too humid. The temperature here is at about 20 centigrade. Moreover, the food in Tianjin is delicious, including the Eight Great Bowls and The Four Great Stews, and some snacks such as Goubuli, a kind of steamed bun with filling. I am sure you will enjoy them.

Our class is a very warm family. There are 60 students in our class, containing 35 boys and 25 girls. You will find it easy to join us since we all want to make friends with you. Then, you needn’t worry about the life here, because the girls and boys in our class are very friendly and helpful. Whenever you get in trouble, they are ready to lend their hands to you.

At last, I personally advise you to learn some basic Chinese, in order to communicate with local people and it is much easier for you to get on with teachers and classmates by speaking Chinese. We are looking forward to seeing you.

Yours

Li Jin

第二篇：20xx高考英语湖南卷书面表达命题分析与满分作文

 

20##高考英语湖南卷书面表达

命题解读与满分作文

湖南省娄底市蓝圃学校 曾省初

Section C (25 marks)

     Directions: Write an English composition according to the instructions given below

in Chinese.

在生活中, 你自已或他人曾有过物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历, 其间有烦恼、有惊喜、有感慨……请就此写一篇英语短文.

  主要内容包括:1) 丢失的物品;2) 物品失而复得的经过;3) 你的感想。

注意:

1.  词数不少于120个;

2.  不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。

通过对湖南高考英语书面表达多年的研究，笔者发现，最近几年湖南高考英语书面表达是由大学教授主笔、中学教师参与的方式出炉，命题和大学英语四级考试的写作接轨。

20##年湖南卷的英语作文正可谓是“情理之中，意料之外”。 “情理之中”是因为今年湖南卷英语作文又回归到主流的提纲式作文，相比于去年的图画式作文，今年考生更容易抓到题目的主旨；而且今年的作文题目与20##年湖南卷的作文（新老师的第一堂课）有异曲同工之妙，都是通过对一个事件的描述，然后发表自己的感想。湖南卷的题材都是以校园生活为中心比如：“我的老师”、“我的同窗”、 “ 我的偶像”“我的课堂”、“我的课外生活”等；要求考生写一篇120词左右的短文风格上更接近开放作文，给考生留有更大的自由发挥空间，让考生有话可说，有句可写。“意料之外”是因为今年的作文不是以议论为主，而是以记叙为主体，这也是很多考生不太擅长的题型之一。

一篇优秀的文章一定要有严谨的结构，精彩的语言和丰富的内容三个部分，这样才能形成一个有机的整体。在高考写作课程上，老师就如何构思结构，升级语言和丰富内容三个方面做了细致入微的讲解，就是为了让每一位考生在高考中能轻松自如面对的“各种”高考作文题目。纵使高考作文题目的 “千变万化”，但是有一条不变的准绳—“三段式作文法”，只要抓住了这条准绳，任何一道高考作文题目对于考生来说都是“A piece of cake”。如下是今年高考英语湖南卷作文的分析。

俗话说，“好的开始是成功的一半。” “三段式作文法”中的第一段的质量直接关乎阅卷老师对该篇文章的第一印象。这篇作文可以采用“开门见山法”，直接通过“生活中，你自己或他人曾有物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历”这一常见现象引入文章话题。 如例文中，“Getting back what you have lost would be an unforgettable experience.” 然后，很自然地过渡到自己或他人也有类似的经历。如例文中，“Last Monday, I lost my expensive cellphone, on which my name was inscribed. Fortunately, it was returned.” 清晰表达出了记叙文 “When, Who, What”三大基本要素。其中，在写作专项训练上，“物品的描述” 可作为一个重点专题进行详细的研读，包括如何介绍物品的外形，产地以及特点等。

第二段，可采用“时间记叙法”描述物品失而复得的经过。如果不按照时间顺序行文，阅卷老师很难在短时间内看到文章的思路，甚至不知所云。例文中 “That morning ” “On arriving at school” “ When the exam ended”等标志词句，都清晰明了地展现了“时间记叙法”的行文思路，也使文章读起来更加流畅。在写作专项训练中，可重点学习如何写“连环画作文”（北京卷必考题型）的，针对“时间记叙法”，结合历年高考中的记叙文进行了大量的操练。

第三段，发表自己的感想，总结全文，升华主题。如例文中，“From this story”，自然过渡到第三段的感想。 “I am firmly convinced of the significance of honesty, which will contribute to building a warm and harmonious society.” 表达出自己通过“失而复得”的故事，体会到诚信对构建一个温馨和谐的社会有重要的作用。运用非限制性定语从句进行结尾能显示出较高的写作水平, 一定能受到阅卷老师们的青睐。

一篇文章好比一幢大厦，只有用严谨的结构做支撑，用丰富的内容做砖块，用精彩的语言做装饰，才能筑造出世界上最壮丽的建筑。

典型范文：

One possible version:

 01Getting back what you have lost would be an unforgettable experience. Last Monday, I lost my expensive cellphone, on which my name was inscribed. Fortunately, it was returned.

That morning, I rushed out of my house and jumped into a taxi, for I would be late for the final examination. On arriving at school, I headed to my classroom quickly, not noticing that I had left my cellphone on the back seat. When the exam ended, to my great surprise, I found the driver waiting at the school gate. He handed the phone over to me, wearing a smile on his face. So touched was I that tears rolled down my cheeks.

From this story, I am firmly convinced of the significance of honesty, which will contribute to building a warm and harmonious society.

One possible version:

02 One day I received an invitation from another school to give a speech on how to learn English well, I was extremely happy and accepted it. I got ready for the speech , put the notes in my bag and went there by bus. While on the bus I discovered the notes and my ID card were missing. I was very worried, but I knew the bus wouldn’t stop for me to look for the lost things at the moment.

  On seeing the documents at the bus station, a cleaner picked them up and found my phone number inside. She thought I must have been worried about it. So she called me, hurried to take a taxi, and sent them to me as soon as possible.

Happy and surprised, I regained the lost items. Thanks to the cleaner’s kindness, my speech was so successful that everyone cheered for me. I was very grateful to the cleaner. From the experience, I have learned that honesty is the best policy. Only in this way will our society be more harmonious and hopeful.

One possible version:

03             Three years ago, just before my departure with my good friend Tommy, he got me a wonderful watch as my birthday gift, which I had ever since been treasuring all the time before unfortunately I got it lost. I used to go everywhere with company of my watch pet but the other day I could go nowhere for its sign. I was so upset and depressed that I lost any desire for doing things and I could not even recall where and how I lost it. What happened next on this morning, however, almost sent my spirits flying higher than sky. Guess what? It found its way back to my dormitory, lying on my bed with a note beside it saying: I’m sure it’s yours, so I brought it back from the library assistant. Jack. Ah, my dormmate Jack found it in the library. Can you imagine how excited I was at that moment? I must offer my thankfulness to Jack for his kindness. And I also need to reflect on my carelessness.

【专题训练】

假设你是图1中的站立者。现在，请你根据以下三幅画，以英语日记的形式叙述你上周六的一段经历，并谈谈自己的感受。

注意：1.词数100左右，日记的格式已为你写好(不计入总词数)；

2．可根据漫画内容适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Saturday　March 26,2011                                                                 Cloudy

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参考范文：

Saturday　March 26,2011                                                                    Cloudy

I had an unusual experience last Saturday.

On that day，I was walking along a street when I saw a lady knocked down by a truck，and the driver just drove away. Without any hesitation，I rushed across the street，put her on my back and carried her to a hospital nearby.  On arriving at the hospital，however，she started to accuse me of knocking her down and demanded I pay for the hospital bills. That really surprised me！Although I tried to explain，she insisted that I should be the very person who was responsible for the accident！I was totally puzzled. Is it right or wrong to help others？What should I do next time?