20xx高考英语作文范文点评

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20##高考复习英语考案

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【专题考案】一、(2009.江西卷)

学校即将举行以“Turning a bad mood(心情)into a good one ”为题目的英语作文比赛,请按下列要求定一篇100词左右的记叙文或议论文。

记叙文                                    议论文

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二、(2009.江苏卷)

鼠标是计算机时代最佳的人机交互工具之一。它极大地方便了人们的计算机操作。但是,过分依赖鼠标的习惯也会带来一些不利影响。请你以鼠标为切入点,根据下表所提示的信息,用英语写一篇短文。

注意:

1.对所给要点逐一陈述,适当发挥,不要简单翻译。

2.词数150左右。开头已经写好,不计人总词数。

3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。

The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

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三、(2009.湖南卷)

假设你是某中学新老师李红,请给你的朋友张华写一封信,告诉他你第一天上课的情况,主要内容如下:

1. 描述一件课堂上令你印象深刻的事情;

2. 介绍你处理该事的方式;

3. 谈谈你的感想。

注意:

1. 词数不少于120个;

2. 可适当发挥想象,增加细节,以使行文连贯;

3. 文中不得出现与本人及学校相关的任何真实信息。

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四、(2009.湖北卷)

假设你是华华,与英国网友汤姆约定用对方的母语通信,以提高各自的外语水平。最近你收到汤姆的电子邮件(附后),发现有一个成语使用不当。请根据下列要点,用英文回一封电子邮件。

要点:

1.不应使用 “无所不为”,应使用 “无所事事”;

2.说明这两个成语的用法;

3.给予鼓励。

注意:  1.词数为120左右;

2.参考释义:无所不为一do all kinds of bad things

        无所事事一have nothing to do

3.除以上两个成语外,邮件中不得使用其它汉字或拼音;

4. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计人你所写词数),但不得抄人答题卡。

附(汤姆的邮件):

华华,你好!

近几天在忙什么事?有什么有意思的事吗?我们的学校放假了,所以这几天在家无所不为,饱食终日,只好上网发伊妹儿。没意思。我决定找份工作,做个自食其力的人。祝好!

汤姆

(以下所给内容不得抄入答题卡)

Hi! Tom

Nice to read your e-mail today. I noticed you’ve begun to use Chinese idioms and used most of them correctly.

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Hope you’ll find a good job soon.

Huahua

五、(2009.福建卷)

某英语报社拟成立“微笑俱乐部”,现向癸未征募会员。要求申请者提交一篇题为“I want to

Smile”的英语短文。请你以申请者的身份,根据以下思路图的提示用英语写一篇短文。


 

注意:

根据思路图适当展开,以使行文连贯;

词数:120左右

I Want to Smile

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六、(2009.广东卷)

第一节  基础写作(共1小题,满分15分)

你是校报小记者,最近进行了一次采访。以下是这次采访的情况:

 [写作内容]

根据以上情况写一篇采访报道,并包括如下内容:

1. 采访的时间、对象和主题;

2. 中小学生近视的发生率及人数;

3. 专家解读。

 [写作要求]

只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。

 [评分标准]

句子结构准确,信息内容完整,篇章结构连贯。

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第二节  读写任务(共1小题,满分25分)

阅读下面的短文,然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Jackie is perhaps the most easily annoyed koala(考拉)at the Featherdale Wildlife Park in southern Australia. All the koalas there are unhappy and complaining. You would be too if you were used to night activities and someone kept waking you up all day while you were trying to sleep it off. That’s right—sleep it off. The average koala is always half asleep because it feeds on the leaves of a special kind that makes it sleepy.

The reason Jackie and her fellow koalas are repeatedly awoken from their deep sleep is so they can be hugged and photographed by tourists,who make the trips to Featherdale and an increasing number of other national parks for just that special experience. Whatever department in the Aussie government in charge of such things is now moving to make the practice illegal,which is

understandable. How would you react,my friend,if you were trying to sleep off a dozen times and some round,furry creature smelling of grass kept waking you?

* 考拉即树袋熊

 [写作内容]

1. 以约30个词概括这段短文的内容;

2. 然后以约120个词就“该不该禁止游客和动物拍照”进行议论,内容包括:

(1)人们在参观动物园时为什么喜欢和动物拍照;

(2)假如你处在那些动物的处境,你会有什么反应;

(3)你认为是否应该禁止游客和动物拍照。

 [写作要求]

1. 在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事,也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子;

2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

 [评分标准]

概括准确,语言规范,内容合适,篇章连贯。

七、(2009.辽宁卷) 

假定你住在一个涉外小区。社区委员会请你帮忙用英文以短文的形式写一封电子邮件,将周末农家采摘活动的安排传达给住户。 

要点: 

时间:下周六上午8:00至11:00 

内容:采摘苹果 

报名:办公室,下周四下午5:00前 

提示:带帽子、手套 

注意: 

1. 词数100左右,开头已为你写好。 

2. 可适当增加细节以使行文连贯。 

3. 参考词汇:社区 community 

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八、(2009.浙江卷)

5月1日,高二(3)班的学生志愿者Li Yue 和 Zhang Hua 去阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)开展志愿者活动(送水果.打扫.聊天等)。假如你是校英语报的记者,请按下列要点用英语写一则100-120个词的新闻报道。

1.时间.地点.任务.活动;

2.老人们的反应;

3.简短评论。

注意:报道的标题和记者姓名已给出(不记词数)。

Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly

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九、(2009.重庆卷)

国外某网站举办新一轮网上讨论活动,正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华,经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件,向其推荐话题。

内容包括:

自我简介

写信目录

话题:我们应该感恩(thankful)

推荐的理由

预祝活动成功

注意:

1.词数100左右

2.邮件格式已为你给出

3.邮件中不能出现本人真实信息

4.请在答题卡上作答

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十、(2009.上海卷)

Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.

某海外学校举办英语夏令营,开设了如下课程:园艺(gardening),烹饪(cooking),防身术(self-defence),护理(nursing)。假如你是王跃华(不可以用自己的真实姓名),写一封申请信,报名参加其中一门课程的学习。信的内容必须包括:

你感兴趣的课程

你期望从这门课程中学到什么

为什么想学这些内容

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附参考范文+解析+点评:

 一、【参考范文】议论文

Turning a Bad Mood into A Good One

 It is very important for us to have a good mood in our daily life. If you have a good mood, you will be happy with everything in the world. Most importantly, you will have a optimistic effect on the people around you. We all will live a harmonious and happy life. It is also good for your health.

     However,sometimes when you meet some difficulties, when you quarrel with others or when you fail in doing something. You may have a bad mood. If so, you should get rid of it as soon as

possible. As we all know, everything has its two sides. So you should think more about its bright side. We are sure that everything will be better with time passing by. Remember: Only you can make yourself happy.

     I hope that everyone has a good mood every day!

【解析】

今年依然是开放式的作文,只提出了一个话题“Turning a bad mood into a good one”, 并给出了体裁上的选择和内容上的简要提示。话题非常切合学生实际生活,考生只要按照要点去写,注意过渡即可。

【点评】

这是第一次在地方卷种中对写作形式(体裁)作出的可选性规定,并分别给出了具体写作内容及写作说明。此举为创新。这个标题作文的命制具备双重可选特征,即既可以通过一个故事的叙述来完成,也可以通过对同主题的议论(重要性、原因与方法)来完成。这是一个典

型的标题作文,江西05年获得自主命题权,五年来,基本上为标题作文形式(除05年外),此次尤为特别。可以预见,在今后的全国卷地方卷试题改革中,这种形式将会成为各卷种效仿的对象,甚至可能走得更远。不过也要指出的是,在本题记叙文要求下的第三条“你如何应对”,笔者认为这样的表述说明文的口气过重,容易误导考生的写作。最好表述为“你是如何应对的”。这样的表述才是叙事性的而不是说明性的了。第二条稍微好一点,不过建议改为“对你的心情产生了什么影响”。总之,那种“如何”,“有何”之类具有说明文性质的表述容易让考生写作时发生体裁“跑偏”现象。

二、【参考范文】

The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.

A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.(153 words)

【解析】

本文为提纲式说明文体裁,所选内容与我们生活相关,考生只要把所给要点逐条陈述,适度发挥,不要逐条翻译即可。

【点评】

对于江苏的考生而言,自08年改革以来,整卷分值虽然下降为120分,但短文写作的分值仍然是25分,和绝大多数卷种同题赋分一样。但是,从写作词数要求、写作话题和写作形式(体裁)几个维度来看,江苏卷的写作可以归为比较难的一类。第一,写作词数要达到150左右的卷种,目前只有广东和江苏两地,09年江苏范文词数为153词。第二,六年来,江苏的话题选择有一个明显的特点:时代性比较强。从“江城介绍”(04)、“建设和谐社会”(05),“奥运志愿者的宜与忌”(06),“阳光体育活动”(07),到09年的“鼠标的利弊”等,这个话题选择

的路径鲜明地反映出江苏卷对时代的敏感性,问题是这些特色话题又给考生带来了表达上的困难。对于优秀的考生,这种话题可能如鱼得水,而对于中等偏下的考生,这种话题显然有点“尴尬”:想说点什么,但要嘛说不出,要嘛说不好。第三,这个“难”还表现在写作形式上,几年来,江苏卷主要采用的是混合形式的写作:陈说+议论。我分析了一下09年江苏卷给的范文,尽管鼠标的好处部分汉语提示很充分,控制很严,但要想精确表达,也不容易。尤其是题中未列出“不利影响”的部分,考生要想用寥寥三、四句话把这个“不利影响”说明白显然需要功力,这个功力首先是要分析什么才是不利影响,列出个一二三,其次是如何转换成英语,最后才是如何集中而简洁地优化句子结构,使之达意而且有条理。由此看来,江苏卷今年的难度不低,如果再在阅读上加大阅读量,那整卷难度就可想而知了。另外,江苏有命制标题作文的习惯(05,06,08),09年卷虽然没有直接给出标题,也没有要求考生写出标题,但主体性标题已十分明晰。

三、【参考范文】

Dear Zhang Hua,

It’s three months since I heard from you last time. Now I want to tell you an impressive story happened on my first lesson.

On hearing the bell, students ran into the classroom as quickly as they can. But a boy, Li Ming, whose father died a month ago, was late for the class. He stood outside the classroom, silently. I smiled to him and let him came in. After a while, he cried on his desk. Then I walked to him and asked what had happened .He told me that his mother was ill and he had to take some medicine for her. At the same time, he apologized to me for his lateness. Moved by his words, I praised him for his deeds and decided to sing a song named “Mother” for the students. How time flies! Class was over before I realized it.

From the story I felt we should respect our parents and do our best to help them. Do you think so? I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours truly,

Li Hong

【解析】

本文属于半开放性提纲式书信体,要点有三,选材学生熟悉,也是发生在他们身边的故事,学生只要把握准情景和要求,使表达的内容不走题即可。

【点评】

湖南卷这是第二次在短文写作中涉及老师(06Mr Moore,09李红)。第一次出现考生假设人是教师——“假设你是某中学新老师李红”。这个假设在历年的高考英语各卷种中都没有出现过,可以理解为考生毕业后的可能,但这个可能只能是大学毕业后的事情了,看来这个未来生活起码还得四年时间。可以划归到第三主题“与考生未来生活相关”。但由于考查的主题仍然是有关学习和课堂之间的事情,总的说来,有话可说,也有话能说,起码可以杜撰一点熟悉的东西。

四、【参考范文】

Hi! Tom

Nice to read your e-mail today. I noticed you’ve begun to use Chinese idioms and used most of them correctly.

However, I’m afraid there is one mistake I’d like to point out. It is “无所不为”. This idiom means “do all kinds of bad things”. Are you doing all kinds of bad things at home? I guess what you were really trying to say is that you’ve got nothing to do these days. In that case, you should use “无所事事” . We usually use “无所不为” to express the idea that people dare to do anything bad, and “无所事事” to describe the situation in which people have got nothing meaningful to do. Have I made myself clear?

Anyway, I’m amazed at the progress you’ve made.

Hope you’ll find a good job soon.

Huahua

【解析】

本文题材现实性强,属于较为保守的提纲式作文,考生只要审好题按照要点去表达即可。

【点评】

六年来,湖北卷的写信人物比较多样而且有趣:05年是明华给建华写信,07年是李华(也是学生会主席,跟09天津卷一样)写信,08年则改成了一个十分怪异人名——卜曼宜,其谐音极似“不满意”或“not very easy”.而09年摇身一变又改成了华华,看来湖北卷是离不开李华同学的影子了。不过好歹总比卜曼宜好些。

本题和04年全国卷I的写作题类似(外国人学中文,中文歌曲比赛),另外,07年高考语文湖北卷作文题也是以母语为话题的,这三者之间似乎有某种联系。不过,本题对语言本身要求更具体,甚至讨论到了成语的用法。应该说,能讨论这么细致的汉语问题对于中学生学英语而言是一个很大的刺激或促进。而且,毫不夸张地说,跨语言、跨文化的启示意义深蕴其间,对其他各卷种的命题思路不无裨益。

五、【参考范文】

There are many advantages of smiling. It can not only make us happy, but also please others. If we smile at life, life will smile on us in return. So I want to smile at all whenever and wherever possible,

First, I would like to smile at my parents because they have given me life and take all the trouble to bring me up. They arrange almost everything for me. With their help, I have made great progress. I would like to say “Thank you” to them with a smile. Then my smile should go to myself, for only in this way can I gain more confidence in smiling my troubles away and live a better life. 

In a word, let’s greet every day with a smile. Tomorrow is another day. 

【解析】

本文为图画式作文,做题的关键是---审题,考生要把握如下几点:

文体:说明文。

主体时态:一般现在时。

主体人称:第一人称。

内容要点:①微笑的优点;②想对其微笑的人物(父母);③对父母微笑的理由;④对  

自己微笑的理由;⑤总结。

【点评】

本题是一个好的标题作文(05福建卷:My Opinion on Cheating in Examinations)。六年来,福建卷基本上使用的是议论性质的写作文体(04陈说,05、06议论,07、08陈说+议论),09年是一个典型的议论性质的文体。话题也非常好,和安徽卷一样,非常适合中学生表达。但从命题的角度看,写作难度较高,因为本题的控制方法不是采用汉语提纲形式,而是采用图文形式,在语言转换上较安徽卷难。从所给范文看,语言难度不高,但思维难度不低。考生得分不易。

六、【参考范文】

Last weekend, I had an interview with eye-doctor Professor Wang about our country primary and middle students’ short-sightedness. It is said that slightly more than 50% students, which ranks the No. 1 in the world, are short-sighted. Professor Wang said the reason of short-sightedness is complicated and three is still no cure for short-sightedness. He suggested that we should not overuse our eyes and do more outdoor exercises. What’s more, since the holding of pen has something to do

with the short-sightedness, we need to pay attention to using the pen.

【解析】

本文题材贴近学生实际生活,这个话题真正的做到“话题来源于学生实际生活”。近视眼是每个校园所必不可少的现象,是学生校园生活得隐形热点。因此今年的基础写作题目让每个学生都有话可说。考生要注意三大要点和表格内容,恰当表达即可。

【点评】

本题话题为近视问题,天津卷曾涉及过(07天津卷:How to Protect Our Eyesight)。但角度有不同。广东卷侧重的是问题本身的描述,而天津则是强调的如何保护视力。不过,能有做天津卷的经验,对广东卷也就不会有难的感觉。更何况广东卷所给信息非常充分,对于考生而言,剩下的主要是组织句子了。需要特别指出的是,陈说性质的文体其核心在于陈述和说明(包括介绍),即讲清楚一桩事情。

读写任务:【参考范文】

The passage narrates that koalas who are repeatedly awoken from their deep sleep are unhappy and complaining for tourists taking photos. The author appeals to us to be more kind to animals.

The reasons why tourists like taking photos of the animals in the zoo perhaps vary from people to people. Some think it a happy reminder of their visit to the zoo or the animals, while others may consider it just sort of fun to have. But anyway they may not share the deep feelings of the animals.

If I were in the same position as the animal in the zoo, my reaction would be very severe strongly against being photographed. No having peaceful surroundings to sleep, don’t you suffer restless and fidgets. No doubt we do and so do the animals.

I think it necessary to ban tourists’ taking pictures with animals, making a comfortable environment for them to live and regarding them as our friends, so as to found harmonious relations with animals.

【解析】

今年的读写任务让学生就“该不该禁止游客和动物拍照”展开议论。议论文的写作有助于培养学生正确的价值观,纠正不正确的价值观。今年的读写任务暗中旨在培养学生保护野生动物的观念、把多一点的空间还给动物的观念、与动物和谐共存的观念。

如果考生从“应该禁止游客和动物拍照”这一观点入手的话就迎合了阅读材料,同时也能够受到改卷老师的青睐。

【点评】

自20##年广东卷改革以来,写作部分的两个试题在写作要求上均过于详细,控制程度很高。尤其是后者,尽管是阅读后的写作,但要领已经被列出,实际上难度已经大大下降。当然,广东卷这么做的主要目的无外乎便于教师阅卷,收缩考生的思维,不给考生跑题的机会。但是若往深的追问,本题给学生的思维空间并不多,这个值得考量。三年来,广东卷已经在短文写作上逐渐形成定势。

七、【参考范文】

Dear neighbors,

We are very happy announce that our community is going to organize an activity for all the community members. Next Saturday, we going to pick apples in a village 20 kilometers away from our town, and all are welcome. We will meet at 8:00 am at the gate, where a blue bus will be waiting. Our outdoor activity will last 3 hours, and we’ll be back at about 11 o’clock.

If you are interested, please sign up at the office before 5:00 pm next Thursday so that we will make necessary arrangements.

We suggest that you bring with you a hat and a pair of gloves.We are looking forward to your joining us.

Community Office

【解析】

本题命制稳健,是中学教学中最为常见的提纲式作文。给出要点学生有话可说。

第一步:审题

看要求:本题要求以短文的形式写一封电子邮件,将周末农家采摘活动的安排传达给住户。开头已经写好,这样格式应该已经给出,审题的重点放在要点和要求上:要点有五项,注意有三项,但注意的第一项是重要的一项。 

理思路:调整要点,讲清本次活动的安排。可以先将活动的时间,活动的内容,要求、注意事项表达出来;然后再写5和3要点,这样逻辑清晰表达合理。

第二步:写作

可以先在草纸上起草,用自己最有把握的句型、单词、短语去表达,要尝试最简单的复杂句,如用定语从句、宾语从句等,但句式不易过于复杂,要用一些恰当的连词,使句与句之间、段与段之间过渡自然。

第三步:检查

作文写完后,最后要进行检查。重点放在要点写全了吗?时态、语态、动词的数、单词拼写对了吗?标点符号、大小写用对了吗?检查完后再抄写在试卷上,注意卷面的整洁。

【点评】

主题与考生学习生活或学校活动无关,但由于是以涉外小区为背景所开展的社区活动,主题空间更为开阔,因此该主题大体符合高考英语写作话题的一般思路,可以归类为外事活动。通常,命题以要点形式给出和以汉语题干形式给出,对考生而言,前者的难度要大于后者。因为要点内容的呈现一般看不出英语的句式结构,而如果是完整或半完整句式的汉语题干却

能让考生比较容易辨别出英语句式结构。这本身就是一种便利。因此,对于各命题单位而言,这几种形式都应该依据整卷难度的分布情况加以合理配备使用,以免过难或过易。

八、【参考范文】

Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly

On May Day, Li Yue and Zhang Hua, students from Class Three, Grade Two, went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work. Upon their arrival, Li Yue and Zhang Hua were warmly welcomed, and respectfully, they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits. Then, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor. Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people.

When it was time for the volunteers to leave, the elderly people thanked them for their kindness. They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.

Li Yue and Zhang Hua were very happy. What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives.

By Chen Jie, School Newspaper

【解析】

本文仍属于提纲式半开放性体裁的作文,选材贴近学生实际,有利于考生的正常发挥,考生只要按照所给要点的思路来写即可。

【点评】

09浙江卷的话题和07湖北卷相似,又是志愿者,又是敬老,了无新意。但这并不就说明该卷乏善可陈。若从以考生为本的角度看,该卷第一次出现在题中直接给出汉语拼音人名,而不是汉语人名,这也算是一个首创。目的只有一个:避免考生出错。其实,遮掩在汉语拼音中的人名也让人看不出这个人名究竟是汉语中的哪几个字,因为对于外国人而言,字母人名只是一个符号,他们是无法想象汉字人名所携带着的鲜活感和亲切感的。

 浙江卷前几年基本上是选择疑问句式的标题作文。例如:“Film or book, which do you prefer?”

(06),请你围绕“How do you prefer your English classes to be taught? In English only, or in both English and Chinese?”这个问题…(07),“Working Individually or Working in a Team”(08)。09年不在题中给出标题,却在文中直接给出标题,不知何意?不知这个对于检测考生的实际能力有何帮助?另外,虽然说的是新闻报道,但实际上是一个典型的叙事性质的短文写作。08年仅北京考了一篇叙事性质的写作。09年,除了北京继续考了叙事外,浙江也出现了叙事性质的文体要求。对于浙江考生而言,其写作难度应该远远低于前五年的写作要求了,应该是福。

九、【参考范文】

Dear____,

I am Li Hua, a student from Xin Hua Middle School. I often visit your website. I am very glad to know that you will make a new round of courses and are collecting topics facing the middle school students. As a student, I really want to recommend a topic to you wholeheartedly. It is that we should be thankful. Living in this world, we have many people that we should be thankful to. We should be thankful to our parents because it was them that brought us into this world; we should be thankful to our teachers because they taught us everything we know and we should be thankful to our friends because when we meet difficulties, they always give us a hand. So I can say we live in a grateful world. I hope that the activity will be a great success.

【解析】

这是一篇命题巧妙地书写体半开发性提纲式作文。话题树有教育意义,符合中学实际引导学生思考问题。在写作中应注意如下几点:

1. 紧紧围绕话题“我们应该感恩”。

2. 但自我简介、 写信目录 、推荐的理由 、预祝活动成功都是围绕话题展开。

3. 注意分清段落层次,上下文的过渡。

【点评】

从写作文体要求看,重庆卷04年要求写记叙文,05年则改成议论文,近四年基本上是陈说性质的文体。就话题而言,近四年都与外事活动或外语学习相关。不过,09年的话题是涉外的话题征集,有些特点。六年来,三次短文写作,三次邮件(其中两次电子邮件)。李华同学出现3次(06,07,09)。总的说来,重庆卷一直比较谨慎,命题基本上没有超出全国卷I的范式。

十、【参考范文】

Dear leader,

I am very glad that your school will hold the English Summer Camp that contains many courses ,such as gardening, cooking, self-defence, nursing and so on 。I want to register to attend a course bout gardening ,because I have liked flowers 、grasses etc since I was a little child。I especially like playing in the garden where I can enjoy the beauty of nature。For one thing ,I hope to gain a bit more knowledge of gardening so that it can help me to major in the gardening after attending college。Besides I wish to get much more information about gardening so as to study it more easily when I enter the university。What's more ,I can realize the bitterness of the gardeners to treasure the plants much more。For another,after graduation from college I will devote my life to cultivate the flowers and grasses to turn our country into a more beautiful state and make many more foreigners come to visit our country 。

Yours,

Wang yue hua

【解析】

本文是书信格式,报名参加其中一门课程的学习,属于半开放式作文。学生在写作时应注意如下几点:

先谈自己感兴趣的学科,从四科中选取自己最有把握和有话可说学科,这是写作的关键,过渡要自然;

2. 再写自己希望学到什么,要把握实用性。

3. 然后谈出想学这些内容的原因,结合现实,理由合情合理。

4. 在写作过程中可以尝试句型的复杂化,适度增加情节

【点评】

上海卷的一贯特点有以下几条:题干短,话题一般与学习或学校生活相关,写作形式主要是议论性质,间或插以混合性质,给考生的思维空间大。还有一点,从不给出范文。09年的Guided Writing属于混合性质:陈说+议论。话题涉外,且与教育教学课程相关,是很好的话题。但对于上海考生而言,材料的提供是否过于丰富了些?参看一下惜墨如金的历年上海卷,你就会发现上海卷习惯于提供简练的题干信息,以利于考生的发挥。这次算是一个异数了。

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