2011专八作文范例（附阅卷老师讲评）
20xx年八级作文题目
According to a recent newspaper report, many famous sites of historical interest in China have begun or are considering charging tourists higher entry fees during peek travel seasons. This has aroused a lot of public attention and also public debate. What is your opinion? Should famous Chinese sites of historical interest charge higher fees during peek travel seasons? Write an essay of about 400 words.
In the first part of your essay you should state clearly your main argument, and in the second part you should support your argument with appropriate details. In the last part you should bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or make a summary.
You should supply an appropriate title for your essay.
Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the above instructions may result in a loss of marks.
范例一：12.5分 及格作文
Recently, there is a newspaper report which has drawn a lot of attention. It says that many famous sites of historical interest have started to increase the fees during peak travel seasons. In my opinion, famous sites of historical interest should charge higher fees during peak travel seasons.
First, charging higher fees during peak travel seasons is a method to balance the application and need. Higher fees would decrease the number of tourists. In peak travel seasons, most people have enough time to go where they want to go. Famous sites of historical interest become their destinations. Too many people deepen the press of environment, hotels and lives in sites. They would make a lot of wastes and noises which would pollute the environment and influence the other’s lives. Too many people would cause the trouble in booking a hotel. These all affect the environment of sites.
Second, a lot of people go to travel at the same time. It would increase the number of cars. Traffic would be in a very slow situation. Traffic jam and accidents would rise in a high number. It would put our families and lives in a dangerous condition.
Third, from the view of tourists themselves. Too much people, shortage of hotels and traffic trouble would influence their feelings and mood. They cannot see the beautiful scenery. What they only can see is people. Sometimes, they even cannot get a safe place to live in. The noises would influence the quiet atmosphere. In a word, everything is out of control.
To sum up, famous Chinese sites of historical interest should charge higher fees during peak travel seasons. This behaviour would not only protect the environment, but also be benefit for our safeness and our good moods.
阅卷组专家评分意见：
该作文结构较为清晰
内容基本切题，审题基本准确，有自己的观点
阐述不够严谨，论据不充分，有些表述意思不明确
语言语用能力不够强，不能很好地反映出四年级英语专业学生的英语能力
得分： 6+5+1.5=12.5
范例二：14-15分良好作文
I was in the Confucius Temple for this year’s Lantern Festival, and I regret that decision till now. There were so many people and it was absolutely impossible to enjoy anything while swamping in the sea of people. If there were an entrance fee to this resort I suppose the situation could be much better. After such experience, I am totally for the proposal of charging tourist higher entry fees during peak travel seasons.
The most direct benefit of this action is that popular travel spots would not be packed with thousands of people which are far beyond their reception ability. Local people, to start with, would plan their visits to the nearby resorts in weekends, avoiding the peak season, and the high costs that come with it. People with vacations too, would consider taking their yearly off in a wise time, bringing down the travel expense. As a result, visitors to famous sites and historical interest could be redistributed to a more average proportion through out the year. With less people, visitors could finally be relaxed, be close the nature, and thus reach the very essential goal of the trip. The pure benefit of price raising is to the visitors themselves.
The resorts could also enjoy privileges of the action. With entry fees‘ raising in peak seasons, the revenue of these resorts could be expecting a noticeable increase. These money could be a great helper in protecting the natural or historical heritages within the area. For a very long time, our country has been throwing money into culture protection, yet that were never enough, for this is such an effort- consuming project, while our country is still in a period emphasizing the development of industry and economy. However, culture protection is important as always, and each of us shall bear the pride and shoulder the responsibility. A raise of ten or twenty yuan in entry fees may not mean a lot for an individual, but it could be much if the money is multiplied with one of the largest populations in the world. Considering from another angle, culture is the treasure of a nation and we are the owner of the nation; thus culture is everyone’ treasure if paying higher fees in peak seasons helps culture protection, the benefits eventually come to the owner — every of us.
To sum up, the proposal for raising entry fees during peak travel seasons is beneficiary. When I squeezed out of the Confucius Temple my rabbit lantern were out of shape. Looking through the proposal I see a harmonious picture in which children were happily circling around their parents, couples leisurely boating in the river, and I could hold a lotus lantern in hand at ease.
阅卷组专家评分意见：7/10+6/8+1.5/2=14.5
优点：
观点明确
内容充实,共452词
个人风格鲜明
有独到见解
段落自然，过渡较好
首尾呼应
问题：
没有题目
有明显的语法、语言错误
搭配错误，Chinglish
段间衔接不够清晰，最好要指示清楚，如：In the first place, Furthermore
范例三：18分优秀作文
We have witnessed many reports both in newspapers and on the Internet that quite a few number of famous historic sites and natural resorts are considering charging tourists higher entry fees during peak travel seasons. Many experts and managers of these sites all believe that charging higher entry fees will lead tourists to travel less in peak seasons and come more often in other time. According to them, higher fees serve as a tool to balance the number of people visiting these famous resorts, as well as a source of fund that can provide for the protection of historic resorts. In addition, higher entry fees will also create profits for these historic sites. However, I strongly believe that higher entry fees in peak travel seasons are unreasonable and unfair, and thus should not be adopted.
Primarily, tourists who aim at visiting a historic site will not be deterred by the relatively higher entry fees. In this sense, the goal of balancing the number of visitors cannot be achieved with higher fees. For example, tourists who come to Beijing all consider the Palace Museum, the Great Wall, and the Summer Palace as their must in travelling. They would come to these historic resorts no matter what the entry fees are. In addition, many tourists may have leisure time only during the peak season. Hence, they are forced to pay higher fees whereas the total number of visitors does not come down at all.
Moreover, higher entry fees should not be considered as an option for protection of the historic sites. As is known to all, world-renowned historic resorts are all protected and maintained by local government. It is the government’s duty to protect and provide funds for the historic sites and the relative maintenance. Funds for the protection of historic sites should come from taxes, not from the visitors. Therefore, to say that higher entry fees can provide funds for the protection of historic sites is unfair for the visitors.
Finally, higher entry fees during peak travel seasons harm the right of the relatively poorer people who wish to travel during that time. To set the entry fees higher in peak travel seasons means that only those who can afford the tickets can have the right to visit those historic resorts. However, everyone is entitled the same right to enjoy the historic sites. There is no reason that these poorer people cannot visit these resorts as others do in peak travel seasons.
In conclusion, higher entry fee cannot help balancing the number of visitors during peak travel seasons. It is also unfair for the visitors and harms the right of the relatively poorer people. Viewed in this light, charging visitors with higher entry fees during peak travel seasons is unreasonable, unfair and unjustified at best.
阅卷组专家评分意见：
内容切题，观点明确
论证比较充分有力
有自己独到的见解和思考
主题句清晰规范
段落间过渡自然
语言语用能力较强
句式多样，表述自然得体流畅
卷面整洁，书写比较规范
有少量的语言错误
得分：9/10+7/8+2/2=18/20
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记住八级作文要求：
1.审题仔细准确；
2.文章结构合理；
3.段落层次清楚；
4.内容扣题紧凑；
5.逻辑思维得当；
6.用词恰当到位；
7.避免低级错误。
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