四级写作经典范文及点评
忙碌的重要性 现代生活节奏紧张，忙碌使许多人感到疲惫不堪，但忙碌对生活却有着十分重要的意义。孰不闻“勤能补拙”，孰不知“业精于勤”，“勤
有三益”？
Importance of Being Busy
Sometimes life becomes so busy that you feel as if you are the only person to whom the whole world has been merciless and that you are the only person who is working harder than anyone else. Yes, the grass on the other side of the fence is always
greener and fresher.
However, the more things one has to do or one is into, the greater the involvement in a mental, physical or social way in these things.① Due to this, one’s own personal problems are out of sight, because all the time one’s mind is thinking of completing the undertaken tasks.② Problems, once they are out
of sight are out of mind.
Each thing that we do adds a new dimension to our
personality. It shapes our thinking and makes us more organized, experienced, knowledgeable and creative. The time and sweat
that we put in everyday into our tasks is the brick and mortar of our future. So friends, it is always better to be busy rather than idle. Now hasn’t everyone heard that an idle mind is the devil’s workshop? Behind every successful man is a devotedly
followed busy schedule rather than a woman.
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行文点评
文章结构总分总。
首句使用了so ... that句型，强调现代生活的忙碌程度。第二句用grass作比喻支持了首句。第二段以However开始，笔锋一转，指出忙碌使一个人投入到所做的每一件都会对我们有好处，并引用谚语an idle mind is the devil’s workshop，从反面说明闲散的危
害。结尾以改编名言的形式画龙点睛。
文章短小精炼，正文中没有出现important或importance等词，却将忙碌的重要性论述得合情合理，水到渠成。文章使用比喻、谚语等写作手法使语言生动活泼，句式多变新颖，如第二段首句使用the more the greater句型，不仅在内容上强调了第3段首可而且在可式上显得有所变化，避无单一。第三段第二句中则以四个并列的形容词organized, experienced knowledgeable and creative深化观点。
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忙碌的重要性
有时候生活变得如此繁忙，以至于你觉得仿佛你是惟一一个世界对你无情的人，而且你是世界上惟一一个比谁工作都辛苦的人。的确，
邻家芳草总是更绿、更新鲜。
然而，一个人越有事情要做或正在做，他投入到这些事情中的精力、体力和社交就越多。由此，一个人就看不到自己的个人问题了，因为他的心里总是在想着如何完成承担的任务。问题一旦眼不见了，
心也就不烦了。
我们做的每件事都会提升我们的人格魅力。它塑造我们的思想，让我们更具组织性，更有经验，知识更渊博也更具创造力。我们每天为完成任务所花的时间和所流的汗水就是建筑我们未来的一砖一瓦。因此，朋友们，忙碌总比无所事事好。大家不是都听过“游手好闲的头脑就是魔鬼的作坊”这句话吗？每个成功男人的背后是一张兢兢
业业的繁忙的日程表，而不是一个女人。
词汇斟酌
merciless a. 无慈悲心的，残忍的
undertake vt. 承担，担任，着手作；答应，保证 dimension n. 方面，特点；尺度，深度；面积
creative a. 创造性的，有创造力的
mortar n. 砂浆，灰浆
devotedly ad. 忠实的，一心一意的
schedule n. 时间表，进度表，计划，安排
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①【注释】the more ... the ...越?越?
【临摹】The truth of life is that the more you want the less you get.生活的真谛就是你想要的越多，反而得到的就越少。
②【注释】out of sight看不见了，不让人看见
【临摹】They looked for the cyclist but he was already out
of sight.他们找那个骑自行车的人，但是已经看不见他了。
思如泉涌
Progress is the activity of today and the assurance of
tomorrow.进步是今天的活动，明天的保证。
Better wear out shoes than sheets.宁可磨破鞋子，也不要蹭
破床单；宁奔波健身也不贪睡而得病。
人生要靠自己创造
生活充满了考验和不可预知性。有些人在困难面前一蹶不振，怨天尤人，而有些人却能走出困境走向成功。我们究竟该怎样面对生活，该
怎样把握自己？
Create Your Own Life
Sometimes things happen to you that may seem horrible, painful, and unfair at first, but upon reflection you find that without overcoming those obstacles you never would have realized your potential, strength, willpower, or heart.① Illness, injury, lost moments of true greatness, and sheer stupidity all occur to test the limits of your soul. Without these small tests, whatever they may be, life would be like a smoothly paved road to nowhere. It would be safe and comfortable,
but dull and utterly pointless.
If someone hurts you, betrays you, or breaks your heart, forgive them, for they have helped you learn about trust and the importance of being cautious to whom you open your heart.② Make every day count.③ Appreciate every moment and take from those moments everything that you possibly can for you may
never be able to experience it again.
Talk to people that you have never talked to before, and listen to what they have to say. You can make anything you wish
of your life.
Create your own life and then go out and live it with
absolutely no regrets.
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本文是一篇哲理性的小
散文，整体内容可以分为两部分。前面三段，着重描写了生活中的考验以及这些考验对于我们的重要性。后面几段则向读者们提出了一些建议，呼吁人们珍惜生活，创造自己的生活，点明文章的主旨照应了
题目。
本文用词考究，句式优美，长短句交错。复合句的使用使得文章
更加赏心悦目，排比反复的修辞手法也为文章增色不少。
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人生要靠自己创造
有时候一些发生在你身上的事情起初看起来很可怕、很痛苦、很不公平，但是经过深思熟虑你会发现，如果没有克服过这些困难的话，
你就永远不会意识到自己的潜力、力量、毅力和勇气。
疾病、伤害、真正伟大时刻的错失以及做了一些愚蠢至极的事情，所有这些事情的出现都是在考验你灵魂的极限。如果不经历这些小的考验，无论它们是什么，你的生活将会像一条通向碌碌无为的平坦之
路。它也许是安全而舒适的，但也是枯燥和毫无意义的。 如果某些人伤害了你，背叛了你或者是刺痛了你的心，请原谅他们，因为是他们帮助你学会了什么叫信任，帮助你懂得要谨慎选择你
要交心的人。
珍惜每一天。珍惜每一刻，并且带走每一刻所能得到的东西，因
为你再也不可能重复这个过程了。
跟那些你从来没有说过话的人说话，并且倾听他们的话语。你可
以做到任何你想做的事情。
创造自己的生活，然后走出去，去毫无遗憾地享受生活吧。
词汇斟酌
reflection n. 反映，反射，深思，考虑
potential a. 有潜力的，有潜能的；n. 潜力，潜能
willpower n. 毅力，意志力
sheer a. 纯粹的, 彻底的; ad. 完全，全然
betray vt. 背叛，出卖，失信于
cautious a. 谨慎的，小心的
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①【注释】upon reflection沉思，深思熟虑
【临摹】At first I thought it was a bad idea， but upon reflection I realized she was right.最初我认为那是个坏主意，
但考虑之后我认识到她是对的。
②【注释】hurt, betray, break 三个动词的连续使用，构成了
一个排比句式，加强了语气。
【临摹】We were in the midst of shock — but we acted. We acted quickly, boldly, decisively. 我们处在惊恐之中，但是我
们采取了行动，迅速、大胆、坚定地采取了行动。
③【注释】count计算在内；认为有价值。
【临摹】Take careful aim and make every shot count.仔细
瞄准而弹无虚发。
思如泉涌
Life is not all roses.人生并非康庄大道。
Adversity is a good discipline.苦难是磨练人的好机会。 Storms make trees take deeper roots.风暴使树木深深扎根。
今日事今日毕 “今日事今日毕”，是一句自古流传下来的谚语，提醒并激励人们要珍惜时间。明日复明日，明日何其多。本文则从一个新的角度诠释了
这句名言。
Never Put off until Tomorrow What You Can Do Today We have been told that never put off until tomorrow what you can do today since childhood. However, there are still many people who like putting off the things that should do today until tomorrow.① They have no plans for their work and their time. As a result, they will not accomplish their goals in the end. For example, one Sunday I felt so tired after having a football match that I did not finish my homework even at night. I thought I could get up earlier to go to school the next morning so that I could finish my homework before class. But the next morning I was not able to get to school in time because of the traffic jam. I was punished by the teacher. It taught me a lesson. From then on I made a determination that I would never put off anything important until the next day. Please remember: Work today, for you don’t know how much you may be hindered tomorrow. Seize the present day，cherish every minute you have now and
trust the tomorrow as little as possible.②
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本文可分为三个部分，首尾部分相互呼应，是对中心论点的概括和总结，第二部分中，作者通过自己的亲身经历来说明拖延时间的糟
糕后果。
本文短小精悍，首尾呼应，脉络清晰。以谚语作题目并在开篇重复题目，使主题更加突出鲜明。举例子是常用的说理方式，使得文章更加具体生动。文章结尾处连用两个祈使句不仅增强了语气，也升华
了主题。
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今日事今日毕
我们从小就接受“今日事今日毕”的教育。然而许多人还是喜欢把今天的事情推迟到明天去做。他们从不计划安排工作和时间，结果导致他们最终无法完成他们的目标。例如，有一个星期日，我踢完足球比赛后感觉太累了，直到深夜也没完成家庭作业。我想第二天早点起来到学校，以便上课前完成作业。但是第二天，由于交通堵塞我没能及时赶到学校，我受到了老师的惩罚。这件事情给了我一个教训，从那时起，我就痛下决心绝不把重要的事情推迟到第二天去做。请记住：今天做吧，因为你无法预知明天又会有什么样的干扰。抓住今天，
珍惜你现在拥有的每一分钟，尽可能少依赖明天。
词汇斟酌
traffic jam 交通堵塞，堵车
determination n. 决心，决定，确定
hinder v. 阻碍，打扰
cherish vt. 珍爱，珍视；怀抱(希望，想法，感情等)
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①【注释】put off 推迟，拖延
【临摹】She is such a workaholic that she even keeps putting off going to the dentist.她是个工作狂，甚至一直拖延着不去看
牙病。
②【注释】排比句式，连用seize, cherish, trust三个动词表
达强调的语气，并增加句式结构的美感。
【临摹】Studies serve for delight, for ornament and for
ability.读书足以怡情，足以博彩，足以长才。
Read not to contradict and confute; nor to believe and take for granted; nor to find talk and discourse; but to weigh and consider.读书时不可存心挑刺，不可尽信书上所言，不可只为寻找
谈资，而应推敲细思。
思如泉涌
To save time is to lengthen life.节约时间就是延长生命。 We always have time enough, if we will but use it aright.
只要我们能善用时间，就永远不愁时间不够用。
Time flies. 光阴似箭，岁月如梭。
依靠自己 当你走出家门开始新的征程，首先要学会的就是要依靠自己，学会独立。没有人可以永远在别人的呵护下成长，独立生活是我们走向成熟
的必经之路。
Depend on Yourself
“Depend on yourself” is what nature says to every man. Parents can help you. Teachers can help you. Others still can help you. But all these people only help you to help yourself. There have been many great men in history. Many of them were very poor in childhood, and had no uncles, aunts or friends to help them. Schools were few and not very good. They could not depend on them for education. They saw how it was, and set to work with their strength to know something.① They worked their
own way till they became well-known.② One of the most famous teachers in England used to tell his pupils, “I cannot make worthy men of you, but I can help you make men of yourselves.” Some young men don’t try their best to make themselves valuable to human beings. They can not gain achievements unless they see their weakness and change their course. They are nothing now, and will be nothing as long as they live, unless they accept the advice of their parents and teachers, and depend
on their own efforts.
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我们应该依靠自己，他人只能帮助我们帮助自己。这是文章的主旨，也是第一段中的主要意思。第二段开始从正面举例说明历史上的伟大人物是怎样依靠自己的力量获得最后成功的。最后一段从反面举例，谈到现在有些年轻人不努力使自己成为对人类有益的人，并给出
自己的建议，与题目和文章开头呼应。
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依靠自己
“依靠自己”是自然告诉每个人的。父母可以帮助你。老师可以帮助你。其他人也可以帮助你。但是所有这些人都只能帮你帮助你自
己。
历史上有许多伟人。其中很多伟人小时候都非常贫穷，他们没有叔叔、姑姑或朋友帮助他们。学校数量少，质量差。他们也无法依靠学校接受教育。他们认识到这一情况，然后就开始自己努力去学习。他们排除万难直到最后成功。英国最为著名的一位教师曾经这样告诉他的学生：“我无法使你出人头地，但我可以帮助你做好你自己”。 有些年轻人不努力使自己成为对人类有益的人。他们不会取得任何成就，除非他们能够认识到自己的弱点，改变自己的方向。他们现在一无所成，而且终其一生都会一无所成，除非他们能够接受父母、
老师的建议，开始依靠自己的努力。
词汇斟酌
worthy n. 杰出人物, 知名人士
achievement n. 成就，功绩
佳句临摹
①【注释】set to work开始工作，着手工作
【临摹】It’s high time we set to work if we want to finish the task today. 如果我们想今天完成任务，现在得开始工作了。
②【注释】work one’s way排除困难前进
【临摹】It takes years to work your way through the examination system until you gain a degree.你需要花上几年时
间努力通过全部考试才能取得学位。
思如泉涌
For many, life’s longest mile is the stretch from dependence to independence.对许多人来说，生命中最长的路程就
是从依赖到自立之间的距离。
God helps those who help themselves.自助者天助之。
目标 很多人做事都带有盲目性，常常是想到什么就做什么，从来没有任何的目标和计划。这样做的结果往往是白白浪费了时间和精力。目标很
重要，那么目标又该怎样确定呢？
Goals
There are three kinds of goals: short-term, medium-term and
long-term goals.
Short-term goals are those that usually deal with current activities, which we can apply on a daily basis. Such goals can
be achieved in a week or less, or two weeks, or possibly months. It should be remembered that just as a building is no stronger than its foundation, our long-term goals cannot amount to very much without the achievement of solid short-term goals. Upon completing our short-term goals, we should date the occasion and then add new short-term goals that will build on those that
have been completed.①
The medium-term goals build on the foundation of the short-term goals. They might deal with just one term of school or the entire school year, or they could even extend for several years. Any time you move a step at a time, you should never allow yourself to become discouraged or overwhelmed. As you complete each step, you will enforce the belief in your ability to grow and succeed. And as your list of completion dates grow, your
motivation and desire will increase.
Long-term goals may be related to our dreams of the future.② They might cover five years or more. Life is not a static thing. We should never allow a long-term goal to limit
us or our course of action.
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本文是典型的总分结构，作者先在第一段中用一句话指明目标有三种：short-term, medium-term 和 long-term goals。然后在下面三段中分别阐述短期目标，中期目标以及长期目标。然后分别展开论
述每段的首句都作为主题句。
三段内容上层层递进，描述每一个目标的段落中第一句话和最后一句话都起到承上启下的过渡作用，并达到首位呼应，相得益彰的效
果。
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目标
目标有三种：短期目标、中期目标和长期目标。
短期目标通常着眼于目前的活动，人们可以以天为单位，逐日实施。这样的目标可以在一周或不到一周、或两周乃至数月内实现。要知道，没有坚固的基础就没有坚固的建筑物；同样，不去扎扎实实地实现短期目标，我们就不可能在实现长期目标上有大的作为。在完成短期目标之后，我们应当标明日期，并在已实现的目标基础上规划新
的短期目标。
中期目标以短期目标为基础。中期目标可能涉及一个学期或整整一学年，甚至可能延续数年之久。无论何时每一次你只能向前迈一步，绝不能使自己泄气或者把自己压得喘不过气来。这样每完成每一步，你就会增强对自己发展和成功能力的信心。随着列出的目标实现日期
表的加长，你的动力和要求也会增加。
长期目标可能与我们对未来的憧憬有关。长期目标可能跨越五年或者更长时间。人生不是静止不变的。我们决不应当让长期目标束缚
我们的手脚，限制了我们的行为。
词汇斟酌
mediumterm a. 中期的
current a. 当前的，现实的，流行的
amount to 总计，总量
extend vt. 延伸，扩展，达到
overwhelm vt. 征服，压倒，淹没
enforce vt. 实施，生效，执行
motivation n. 动机，激励
佳句临摹
①【注释】build on 以?为基础，建立于?，指望?
【临摹】Let us build on past and prepare for future. 让
我们继往开来。
②【注释】be related to 与?有关，涉及?
【临摹】Wealth is seldom related to happiness. 财富与幸
福并无过多关联。
思如泉涌
The secret of success is constancy of purpose. 成功的秘
诀在于持之以恒。
Complacency is the enemy of study. 学习的敌人是自己的满
足。