小学作文批语大全
1、批评式：例如：“此文语言不流畅，书写不认真，缺少生动形象的描写，是一篇不成功的作文。”如此评语，对于那些写作不认真的学生，可适当采用一下，但不可常用，否则会挫伤学生的进取心。
2、表扬式：“本篇作文选材新颖，构思精巧，动用了对比、反衬等多种写作手法，人物刻画细致形象，读后让人久久难忘，是一篇上乘的佳作??”这样的评语，适于那些写作功底深厚的学生，老师衷肯的评价，会让他们的作文更有高度与深度。
3、激励式：学生的写作水平是不均衡的，有的作文只是局部或个别句子、词语精彩，那么老师在写评语的时候，就要抓住学生的这些闪光点，来激发他们的写作兴趣。“文中的两个比喻句很美妙，独特，读后有身临其境的感觉，我很喜欢，希望以后还能享受到，老师相信你不会让我失望的。”虽然寥寥数语，但这样激励所起的作用是不可估量的。
4、劝勉式：作文是学生抒发心灵的芳草地，他们的喜怒哀乐尽显其中，因此教师在写评语的时候，更要关注学生的思想动态，把他们引到积极向上的轨道。“人可以用精神的高度让自己远离物质的贫困，在别人享受美食的时候，你可以沉浸在精神食粮的摄取中，它将给你带来无穷的乐趣，让你在宽度与深度上超越他们！”我想，这样几句话带有劝勉式的话语，足可以使那些因贫困带来烦恼的学生感到释然。
5、 反问式：教师有时可以根据学生的作文特点，提出一些带有深度的问题，让学生自己去思考、解答，在不断反思中提高写作水平。例如：你认为哪些地方描写最精彩？为什么？；文中有哪些深刻的体悟？；你使用了哪些写作技巧？；你最不满意之处是什么？??
小学生作文批语集锦
1．你很善于观察生活，能敏锐的捕捉一个个有意义的瞬间；你是个很有潜力的学生。
2．文章的语言很流畅，也写出了老师的感受。你是老师的知音，希望我们共同切磋，在文学的百花园中采撷芬芳的一束。
3．对不起，这一段老师没有读明白，你愿意为老师再解释一下吗？谢谢你。
4．你的字迹工整，书写很优美老师要向你学习。文章选材如果再新颖些，肯定会与书写交相辉映。你认为呢？
5．太棒了！你的文章，再现了东北人的憨直爽朗，使读者顿感神清气爽。语言流畅至极，通感运用尤为巧妙。你的笔锋具有征服力和感染力。努力，再创辉煌！
6．你的文章象一条缓缓而流的小溪，清秀，流畅。文笔优美，感情真挚细腻，具有个人风格。愿你在写作路上继续采撷生活中的朵朵浪花，让自己的风格更趋完善！
7．行文笔锋犀利，旁征博引，根底深厚。虽然在社会问题
的分析上还有些绝对化，但文章依然以一种热辣和率直令人感动不已。再下功夫加强对史书和社会评论进行研读、思考，相信你的文章会日趋成熟，更加耐读！
8．涉世不深的少年走近复杂的社会，这本身就是一种睿智。文章语言平实而柔和，描写很随意，似乎引领着读者在心灵的原野上漫步。不足是议论略感缺乏棱角。要知道，精粹的议论可起到画龙点睛的作用，会使你的文章更加深刻。继续练笔，你会更出色！
9．本文文笔优美清新，富有一定的哲理性。文中写“我”在大海边散步，大海不仅给予“我”美的享受，还引起“我”的沉思和联想，可以说是大海给了我畅游的空间，“我”为大海注如入了生命，使大海成为一个具有高尚人格力量的“人”。本文读后给人以美感，引人深思。
10．除了上课就是下课，学校生活似乎平淡乏味，但本文却善于从平凡中发现不平凡，而且表现得津津有味：紧张的早晨，战斗的中午，疲劳的晚上，每个时段都选取了极富生活情趣的镜头加以点染。清新活泼的语言，生动地展示了当代中学生积极向上的精神风貌。
11． 本文无论是思想性还是艺术性都是很高的，读后让人久久回味。构思巧妙，
运用对比手法，深化了主题；情节也颇具匠心，整个故事既出人意料之外，又在情理之中。语言朴实无华，采用白描手法，作者的爱憎包含在叙述之中，能让读者去体会，去深思。
12文中对父亲的介绍是全面的：从外貌到内心，从工作到生活；对父亲的介绍又是有重点的：重在写父亲的感情。人物形象丰满、真实，富于生活气息。为这样的父亲自豪吧，再努力，不要辜负父亲的期望！
13．你能够由雪联想到人生追求，从生活细节出发，创新精神可嘉。本文体现了你平白的文风，谁说“白开水”不是最佳的饮料？
14． 全文几句俗语的引用恰到好处，以怀旧为线索。这正体现了你的思想意识。
15． 你的文章很有创意——用几何证明题的形式来完成构思。全文文学色彩很浓！
16． 作者“形散神聚”地驾驭能力很强，整篇文章一气呵成，行文如流水一般，给人明快舒畅的感觉！
17．作为随感，你的文章文思敏捷，意愿纷呈。字里行间流露出的人生体验的丰富和思想感情的细腻让老师感到惊
讶。希望你再接再厉，在今后的写作中形成一道属于自己的风景线！
18．你是个很有主见又不乏真知的学生，对你的观点我十分认同，但如果行文安排中结构再紧凑些，那就是锦上添花了。
19．这篇文章选择了一个全新的角度，让你的思想可以在这里自由的驰骋，这是你最大的成功之处。老师要提醒你的是透过纷纭的世事，总有一些准则可供我们处世时把握，让你的思想更深刻些，你将会时时收到“滴水看世界”的效
果。
20．如许娟秀的字迹，清晰严整的结构，不由给人以耳目一新的感觉，这一点老师真的应该向你学习。就让我们在今后的语文学习中互相促进好吗？
21．文如其人，你的文章和你的为人一样朴实、豁达。你的作文功底很好，这也是你长期磨练的结晶。希望你在未来的学习过程中，用心感受和体味生活，写出更加感人的好文章。
22．文能言声，我想文章正是你心灵的反映。人生的路途确实很曲折，也很漫长，但只要你努力执着地往前走，成功的桂冠必将属于你。
23．文能怡情。不能把写作文当成自己的一项负担，而应该以积极的心态、细腻的笔触记录下自己的心路历程。
24．可以说你的文章充满了真情实感。人嘛，失败在所难免，有勇气能面对失败就更加难能可贵。我相信是金子，总会有闪光之时。希望你尽快调整心态，你将会发现天空更加湛蓝。
25．真是“下笔如有神”啊。看来你一定阅读了大量的文学作品。内容如此丰富，更显示了你的文学功底。只是如果把材料再按一定的逻辑顺序调整一下，此文会更精彩。
26．看了你的文章，仿佛眼前流过一条小溪，清纯，可爱。希望你能保持住这样的文风，用纯净的语言表达出丰富的内涵。
27．作文如做人，从你的生活感受中可以看出你是个积极上
进的好青年，你看事物有自己的独到见解，认识深刻，真是难能可贵。
28．读你的文章真是一种享受。首先是思想感情的愉悦，当然来自你文章深邃新鲜的立意。所谓“登山则情满于山，观海则意溢于海”，你是个生活的有心人，你用真情打动了别人，这是你作文的最大成功。
29．清秀脱俗的字迹透脱着你的聪明智慧，稳中求进、扎扎实实是你今后写作努力的方向。
30. 精心的构思，深邃的思索显示出你在写作天地中正在不断成长起来。今后的写作之路还很漫长，望你能努力思索，不断创新。
31. 虽然写作对你来说并不是很喜欢的，但你却像蜗牛一样踏踏实实走好每一步，坚持写作，从不辍笔。你的精神着实令人钦佩，以你的个性定会闯出自己的一片天地。
32. 虽然你能身心愉悦地生活在自己的天地里，但社会的发展已经全球化，所以你应该以崭新的姿态投入到集体生活之中，适应社会的发展。
33. 少年人生，总写着许多梦幻般的故事；少年心中，总装着许多神奇的向往。这一篇短小的文章，像是一叶载满梦幻的小舟，盛装着作者的童真、梦幻、向往和刚刚起步成熟，向着远方进发。
34. 关心生活，关注社会，并不是成年人的特权。通过这一篇《意外》看得出来，在你的心中，不仅装盛着童真和书本、学校，而更多的是不尽的关注社会的心事。这一篇文字，一
波三折，尤其心理描写很突出，结尾的议论升华了文章的主题。
35. 语言得体而富有浪漫色彩，文脉畅通，彰显出知己“书虫”的形象以及“我”与“知己”的“知”“己”之情分，灵动、俊雅。
36.关于生命脆弱的话题，我们在平时似乎已听了许多，它能在一刹那消失。如果你在田野，漫步于森林，脚踏落叶，仰望蓝天，你是否可以感到生命的呼吸？是的，世界因生命而美丽，生命需要互相关爱，这正是你的《断章》所要表明的主题吧！
A、本子清秀、整洁，犹如海滨小城的街道一样，找不到一点脏……端端正正的字迹，让人看了真舒服……你的字像印的一样漂亮……很惭愧，我字没有你写的好看……
B、随随便便，字哪能不像猫掏的似的……字不在格子中间，当然看起来不顺眼……你的字东倒西歪，是不是今天风太大，才刮成这样的……我不相信你的字写不好，永远就这么潦草……认真耐心地写，你会写的比我还要棒…… 内 容
A、这般丰富的内容，简直和作家写出来的差不多呀……你的习作有血有肉，读起来真是一大享受……你的作文内容具体，我读的十分过瘾……你平时肯定爱看作文书，才写出这么多字……
B、干巴巴的内容如同白开水，一点味道也没有，多加些优美的词句就好喝了……不如刘维维字数多（或者举其他差生名字），你不觉得有点难为情吗……你的作文像90岁老太太的嘴，干瘪空洞，讲话直漏风……
语 句
A、 流畅生动的语句，好似庐山瀑布，飞流直下，通顺极了……比喻得十分贴切，说明你一向观察细心……你怎么想出这么巧妙的拟人句的……反问句运用在这里多么合 适……这个感叹句表达了你当时真实的感情……古诗引用恰到好处，我以后也要把学过的诗用到作文中去……歇后语用的妙啊妙啊，把我肚子都笑疼了……
B、作文疙疙瘩瘩，读起来很难受，如同走在乡下凹凸不平的小路上，不小心就容易跌一跤……句子像被谁切断了，不完整……写好后仔细读一读，就会发现不通的地方……不要怕麻烦，好文章都是改出来的……不能老指望别人替你改，要学会自己修改每句话……
层 次
A、小节分的清清楚楚……小节划分合适……一个小节讲一层意思，段落分明……
B、层次混乱，一节包含那么多内容，读着有喘不过气来的感觉……小节分的太少，你舍不得多分吗……中间一节还能再分几个小节……一、二小节不该分，要合并……这一节与上面小节内容联系不上……
详 略
A、重点突出……重点部分写的详细，不错……事情的经过一五一十都叙述清楚了……按游览的顺序记叙了各个风景点，重点描写了……
B、第X节写的过于罗嗦……看不出这篇作文重点是什么……不是重点的内容应该简单写一写……
题 目
A、题目新鲜，像春天的竹笋，又嫩又脆……题目很有意思，让人忍不住想看下去……告诉我，你从哪想出这么绝妙的题目……题目加标点符号（省略号、问号、感叹号、破折号），与众不同……我很喜欢你这个有趣的题目……
B、题目老一套，人家就没多大兴趣看你的作文了……这样的题目人人都会起，太一般……内容写的似乎和题目对不上号……动动脑筋，换个啥题目更合适……我看题目不如叫《……》更恰当一些……
标 点
A、标点打得规规矩矩，看出来你是个做事顶真的人……标点用得十分准确……
B、 内容再精彩，标点马马虎虎乱打，大家也不愿意读你的作文……丢了许多标点，你想让我一口气不停地读下去，憋死我呀……标点可不好吃啊……标点打的太多，读 起来一跳一跳的，仿佛瘸子走路……希望你认真打好每个标点……一句话意思说完了应该打句号……省略号占两格，不能打在一个格子里……
鼓励的话语
这篇写的超过上一篇，继续加油啊……内容再具体生动点，你很有希望成为作文小组成员……多读书细观察勤思考，你的习作很快就会在报刊上发表……丁逸珊、娄维又不是神童，他们能做到的，相信你也能做到，而且会比他们表现更出色……都是秦老师教，你还怕写作水平不上升吗……
每晚坚持看作文书，我就是这样掌握了很多好词语的……世上无难事，只怕有心人……现在你习作的字数比以前多多了，这是你认真写日记的结果……你不想成为作文明星吗？练出一双“贼眼”吧……上次你的作文在班里公开朗读，向你表示祝贺。下次争取写得更棒，好吗？……
不要总担心自己比别人笨，只要按秦老师要求做，你的梦想迟早会实现……老是写不出什么内容，是因为你付出的汗水还太少……把作文小组同学的日记、作文借去多看看，保证对你有很大帮助……
灵感从来不喜欢拜访懒汉……勤奋勤奋再勤奋，当你的名字出现在报纸上的时候，你会觉得吃点苦是值得的……
第二篇：小学英语作文大全[1]
英语作文
题目：A Happy Day in Spring
提示：下图是Mr. Black 一家人在春天的某一天在野外游玩的场景。请用一般现在时描写图中所呈现出的内容。可作适当的想象和发挥。
要求：1、条理清晰，意思明确、连贯，句子通顺，标点正确，书写工整、规范。
2、不少于70个单词。
A Happy Day in Spring
It’s spring. It’s sunny and cloudy today. There are many big trees in the park. Mr. Black’s family have a picnic in a park. They bring many food there. They bring fruit, drink and bread. Mr. Black and Mrs. Black talk with each other. They talk very happily. Ann reads a magazine. Tom likes flying a kite. The kite flies very well. They are hungry now. They want to eat their food. They are very happy.
2、根据给出的材料，写一写Mike这个
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周末的活动计划。
Mike is a student. He is my good friend. He is busy at the weekend. He is going to read a magazine this Saturday morning. He is going to go to the zoo this Saturday afternoon. He is going to buy a book this Sunday morning. He is going to learn Kungfu this Sunday afternoon. He is going to watch TV this Sunday evening.
3、根据下面提供的内容，写一篇英语短文。要求语句通顺，条理清楚，字数不少于50个单词。
Amy是个美国女孩，六年级学生，十二岁。她向别人自我介绍，并介绍她的家庭。她有个双胞胎姐姐，爸爸是医生，妈妈是老师，她非常爱他们，他们也很爱她。
My name is Amy. I come from US. I am
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an English girl. I am a student. I am in Grade Five. I like my teacher. Her English is good. There are four people in my family. I have a twin sister. My father is a doctor. My mother is a teacher. I love them very much. They love me, too.
4、题目： My net friend（我的网友）
要求：1.条理清楚，意思连贯，语句通顺，标点正确，书写清晰、规范；
2．要将提示词全部体现在作文中；不得少于50个单词。
提示词：（1）computer （2）net friend (3) talk with each other(互相交谈)
(4) in the chat room (在聊天室) （5）talk in English (用英语交谈) （6）good now
My net friend
I am Tony. I have a computer. I have a new friend. His name is Jack. He is 12 years old. He is a student. He likes surfing the net. We often talk with each other in the chat room. We talk in English. My English is good now. He is a good boy. I like him - 3 -
very much. Do you want to have a net friend?
5、提示：根据下面所给出的这张Ann的小名片，以“我的好朋友”为题，写一篇小短文，介绍Ann的基本情况。
要求：1、条理清楚，意思连贯，语句通顺，标点正确，书写清晰、规范。
2、要将名片中的内容全部体现在作文中。
3、不少于60个单词。
My good friend
I have a good friend. Her name is Ann.
Her Chinese name is Wang Xiaolan. She is from England. She is in Beijing now. She is in She is in eyes and yellow hair. Her father is a doctor and her mother is a nurse. Her brother is five years old. She likes dancing, singing and watching TV. She is friendly and she likes to help others. What a good girl!
6、短文写作。根据给出的提示和要求，写 - 4 -
一篇65个单词左右的英语短文。
要求：1、写一封介绍你一家的电子邮件给
Jay
Hello, Jay,
I am very happy to be your net friend.
There are four people in my family. They
are my parents , my sister and I. My father
is the oldest and the tallest. He can drive a
car. He is a doctor. My mother is a factory
worker. She works hard. My sister is a
student. She is the best in her class. My
hobby is playing basketball. My sister and I
go to school on foot. I have a happy family.
What about you?
Bye- bye，
Benson
7、Jack 昨天跟他妈妈买东西，请根据下表的信息，写一篇不少于60个单词的小作文。
Happy Shop：Some pieces of candy ￥4
A roll of toilet paper ￥5
Mr. Chen’s Store：A carton of ice cream￥15 Uncle Eddy’s Store：A bottle of shampoo - 5 -
￥45 A pair of socks￥8
Big Blue Department Store：A bag of chips ￥9 Toy car ￥105
Yesterday was Jack’s shopping day. He went shopping with his mother.
They went to the They bought some pieces of candy. They 4 yuan. They bought a roll of toilet paper. They bought a carton of ice cream at .They bought a bottle of shampoo and a pair of socks at They went to They bought a toy car. It’s 105 yuan. They were very happy.
8、假设你是May, 请用不少于60个单词来向你的笔友Jay介绍你的家庭情况，请在文中使用3个最高级和2个比较级。
Hi, Jay,
I’m very happy to be your pen-friends. I have a warm family. There are four people in my family. My father is the tallest and the oldest in my family. My mother is beautiful. - 6 -
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t. I am three years older than my sister. My sister is the youngest in my family. I love my family. What about you?
Bye bye,
May
9、根据提示，从表格中获取信息写一篇不少于60个单词的小作文，要求提示的内容要全部体现在作文中。
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y Friends
I have
two good friends. They’re Zhang Ping and Jim. Zhang Ping is 12. Jim is three years older than her. He’s 15. Jim is heavier than Zhang Ping. He’s 60 kilograms. Jim is taller than her. He’s 162cm. Zhang Ping is a Chinese girl. She lives in Xinhui. Jim is a Canadian boy. He lives in Guangzhou now. Zhang Ping likes red. Her favorite sport is
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badminton. Jim likes blue. His favorite sport is swimming. I like them very much.
10、描写你的周末生活，注意用一般现在时。
My Weekend
I have happy weekend.
On Saturday morning I always have English classes at school. I study hard in the classroom. In the afternoon I often play computer games. On Sunday morning I often draw pictures. Sometimes I visit my grandmother and grandfather. Sometimes I listen to music. On Sunday afternoon I often do housework or go shopping.
So I love weekends.
11、昨天是3月20日，也是你的生日，请描写你的生日派对，注意用一般过去时。
My birthday
Yesterday was March 20th. It was my birthday. I had a party. I ate too much. Mike brought a carton of ice cream. Jenny brought some candy. Mary brought a lot of cookies. My mom made a cake. My dad - 9 -
bought a toy car for me. I was very happy. At the party we sang and danced. We had a good time.
12、写一个你最喜爱的人，请对他/她进行一定的外貌描写。
My Favorite People
Who is your favorite people? My favorite people is my mother. She is beautiful. She is 38 years old. She is tall and thin. She has big eyes and long hair. She likes cooking. She cooks good meals for us every day. And she always does all the housework. She looks after my father and me. I love my mother very much.
13、请描写一下你的房间，注意要使用“there be ”句型。
My Bedroom
I have a nice and small bedroom. There is a beautiful bed and two small chair. I also have a big and tall closet because I have many clothes. There is a big desk next to the - 10 -
window. I always do my homework at the desk. There is a family photo on the wall. We took this photo this summer holiday. I like my bedroom.
14、请以你所在的学校“育英小学”描写你的学校。
My School
I study at Yuying Primary School. My school is very big and beautiful. There are three buildings and a playground. There are many trees and flowers. My classroom is very big and bright. There are 60 students in it. They study hard and always help with each other. Our teachers are very nice and smart. I like my school.
15、根据下面提供的信息，写一篇60字左右的作文。
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My Friend
I have a good friend. We are in the same class. His name is Bill. He is 13. He likes sports very much. These sports are tennis, soccer and basketball. He plays tennis twice a week. He plays soccer twice a week. He plays basketball once a week. He often likes to wear black T-shirt and blue pants. His phone number is 5352375. Everyone likes him.
16、请写一个你最喜爱的季节，要写出你喜欢的原因。
My favorite season
My favorite season is summer. It’s hot in summer. There is a summer vacation in - 12 -
summer. I don’t go to school. I think many children like this season, because they can eat ice-cream and go swimming. I can go swimming. Sometimes I go to the beach with my parents. Sometimes I go to the swimming pool with my friends. I usually visit many places in summer vacation.
17、描写一种你最喜爱的动物，要对它进行外形描写。
My Favorite Animal ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．
My favorite animal is rabbit. Its name is ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．Sweet. Sweet has long ears. It’s very small. ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．It’s white. has a short tail. It has ．．．．．．．．．． It ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．red ．．．eyes. It likes eating carrots. It likes jumping. ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．It goes jumping three times a day. I like it ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．very much. It’s lovely. It’s my best friend. I ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．．like the rabbit. ．．．．．．．．．．．．．．
18、同学们，你一定有很多的爱好，请你写 - 13 -
一个你的爱好，字数不少于60个单词。
My hobby
My hobby is collecting stamps（集邮）. There are many stamps in my room. I like stamps very much. There are many things on the stamps. They are colorful and beautiful. After school I usually go to the post office and there are many people there. I learn a lot from collecting stamps. I like collecting stamps very much.
19、寒假很快就要到了，请你为你的寒假写一个计划。快点把你的计划写出来吧！
My Winter Holiday
It’s January. My winter holiday is coming. I am going to go to Thailand. I will go there by plane. I like the food in Thailand. It’s spicy and tasty. In the winter holiday, I am going to play basketball. I am going to paint pictures, too. I will help my mother do some housework. I will be very happy in my winter holiday.
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20、假设Jack 是10岁,短发,1.5m, 50kg; 而May 是12岁,长发,1.6m,45kg。请运用学过的句型介绍和比较一下他们的特征。
Jack and May
I have two good friends. They are Jack and May. He is ten. He has short hair. He is 50kg now. And May is a beautiful girl. She has long hair. She is two years older than Jack. She is 12 now. She is taller than Jack. She is 1.6m. But Jack is heavier than May. May is 45kg. They are lovely students. I like them.
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