Choosing University of Bristol is the choice I will never regret. I am（原文为“I?m”。 正式文体写作中应避免使用缩写形式，而该使用Full-spelling。） fond of the city?s architectural style. There are many similarities between Bristol and my hometown (Where is your hometown?). They are both harbor cities, and even their layouts of ports are similar. I hope that I can learn advanced knowledge of civil engineering in Bristol and use it to make contribution of constructing my hometown. So I want to stay in Bristol and study in University of Bristol to achieve my ideal.

I?m eager to enter University of Bristol because of its laboratory facilities and on-the-spot investigation project in the teaching process. For the last two years, I majored in Applied Chemistry, the teacher taught us that CAD or free-hand drawings of engineering elements completely depend on the accuracy of line and data, which instilled me a rigorous viewpoint: any miscalculation of fulcrum in the foundation will make a building collapse. I enjoy this strong and unique academic atmosphere（浓厚而独特的学术氛围） in University of Bristol, with the most exciting part being that I can personally test the engineering elements which are painted by me. (不知道作者在这里用painted一词是否想表达“给工程部件?上色?”这一意思，如果想表达“起草，画草图”这个意思的话，应该用sketch。)

My greatest passion is to solve problems with the combination of using physical and mathematical methods. For instance, when the teacher taught the application of double integral in volume, my partners and I had discussed about the application of double integral in finding barycenter and kinetic energy. (这句并没有解释如何运用物理和数学解决问题，只是简单说了“和搭档一起讨论”而已。这个例子需要补充进一步的说明。) Another successful attempt is that, during the internship in Mechanical Training Factory lasted for a semester, my group reformed a vise?s base with simpler structure but less material wastage, by increasing irregular chassis and the inclines. At the end of the semester, it turned out that my grade was the highest in my class and the fourth in the department of chemistry. On-the-spot investigation project in University of Bristol means that I have more opportunities to participate in practical work and test my innovative ideas of structural engineering.

Volunteer Work

I learned the importance of civil engineering in my voluntary work, a project helping autistic children in a welfare home named “heart-words love outreach” （如果可以补充志愿工作的时间和具体地点会更好。 如在某市某区，某年某月的几号到几号进行了为期几天的XXX志愿活动。）. Through my observation of the living condition in the welfare home , I found that improvement of the facilities, such as re-designing the layout of stairs and emergency windows, can enhance the security of the home and easy the disabled children?s life. I always want to bring more security to these asylums by improving their indoor facilities. （在这段里面还需要加上作者在这个志愿项目具体负责了哪些工作，从这些中学习到了什么，个人能力又得到了怎样的提升。）

In addition, I worked at the Student?s Union（作者在学生会中担任何种职位，负责何种工作？）. I arranged lots of（最好给出一个具体的数字。） physical activities when I was the minister of the Sports Department and I host some of them（同样地，最好说作者主持过几次的活动。）. Through these working experience，I developed leadership, the ability of management and the spirit of teamwork. It is said that there are more than 190 student organizations in University of Bristol. （It is said that是“据说”的意思，应尽量避免这种含糊的表述。 建议作者做些资料搜集，

使用确切的数据。）Participating in these organizations will instill my sense of cooperation and making contribution.

I am longing pursuing a postgraduate degree in University of Bristol. .

Thank you for your time and attention to my above essay. Your kind consideration on my application to the admission to University of Bristol would be much appreciated.

（结尾段应保持简洁，表达礼貌的致谢和真挚的愿望。原文中作者转专业的故事可以放在文章其他段落中，但不适宜放在结尾段。）

第二篇：Personal Statement 教育类

PERSONAL STATEMENT

Jia Xin

原作者岁数不大，但专业改换不少。怎样才能讲清楚现在申请的专业现在有其必然性呢？

In China as in the US, one can easily give up the career of a language teacher to

become a lawyer or a businessman. I, however, gave up a promising legal and business career to become a language teacher, but I have never regretted it. In fact, the more I teach, the more committed I am to teaching. But not just teaching. Having battled with China's traditional mode of teaching for several years, I now would like to help improve teaching in China by introducing new and more effective instructional technology and media into the country. For that, I would like to pursue an advanced degree in education in your country.

Now an English teacher at the training center of the China National Container

Corporation, I graduated in 1995 from the Capital University of Economics and Business in Beijing, where I majored in business law. At this highly respected higher-learning

institution, I received broad training that was both rigorous and vigorous. After four years of undergraduate studies, the strong logic inherent in law translated into strong logic in my thinking. With the knowledge and skills I attained in the law program, I boast the kind of intellectual maturity that would help me whatever I do. But law was never my first choice for a profession.

Starting from my high school days, I always dreamed of becoming a teacher. In the second year of high school, we once had to write an essay on the topic "what do you want to do when you grow up." I proudly wrote, "I want to be a teacher!" But my parents shattered my dream by insisting that I pursue another profession. My father, an engineer with a Ph.D. degree, and my mother, a university teacher of English, had their reasons. Chinese teachers, particularly those teaching at the primary and secondary levels, are poorly paid and begrudgingly respected. Being young and inexperienced in the world, I acceded to their wishes when I was choosing my major for the university.

But my passion for teaching was not to be stifled forever. Given any opportunity, it would burst out. Upon graduation with an LL.B. degree, I first took up the position of a supervisor with the China National Container Corporation in charge of its Overseas Sales Department. As the job entailed frequent translation and interpretation between Chinese and English, I persisted in improving my English proficiency by attending

various training courses and learning it on my own. My command of the foreign tongue became so good that, after about one year, I began to teach it to my colleagues on a full-time basis at the company's training center. After a huge detour, my career finally got back on track.

What makes teaching so enjoyable to me is that it is a learning experience. I enjoy it the most when my students ask difficult questions, particularly questions that I have to think long and hard to answer. I also enjoy posing questions to students, but my questions are never intended to intimidate the students or even test their knowledge but rather

designed to stimulate their minds. In the constant exchange of questions and answers, students and teachers improve themselves alike to the credit of the old Chinese saying: To teach is to learn. In my three years of teaching, I really have learned a great deal.

One of the things I have learned is the ability to not only deal with but also strike an accord with people of different backgrounds. My students at the training center are all adults accomplished in a variety of roles and professions. In most cases, they are older than I am. While I stand as their equals, I have served as their mentors and role models the same way as most teachers do their students. By so doing, I have won their trust and confidence in what I teach, which has helped to make my teaching powerful and effective.

To take full advantage of my teaching skills, I started in October 1996 to teach English and other subjects at the primary school I attended when I was a child. As the children I teach are at the age when I studied here, I am particularly sensitive to their needs and appreciative of their potential. Together with other teachers, I designed various training programs in calligraphy, art, writing, mental calculation, and English, programs that combine learning with entertainment. The kids in my class are now learning more and faster thanks to the fun they find everyday in my programs.

Entertainment is, however, by no means just a ploy I use to sweeten the bitter pill of learning for the children, but rather has its own intrinsic value. While kids can hardly learn well without being able to have fun, the lack of fun hurts more than the kids' ability to learn. It can impair the kids' emotional and psychological health to an extent that no amount of knowledge and skills drab teaching force-feeds into them can make up. Entertainment is therefore part and parcel of what we teachers have to provide to

children if we are to help them grow up into productive members of the society. The way I see entertainment, it should be considered an end in education.

As China's education is oriented overwhelmingly towards helping kids pass exams, entertainment is about the least on the mind of an average teacher or principal. In the rush to produce super kids as measured by the grades out of exams, the purpose of

education is lost all too often. The curriculum is limited to subjects covered by mandatory exams. Students are seldom encouraged to come up with original ideas. Interaction between teachers and students is kept at a minimum in the classroom. The teachers compete to heap homework on the students, as do the parents. While everybody is tired to death, few kids get armed with the ability to take initiatives or solve real-world problems. It is high time that fresh approaches were brought in.

One of the ways to make a change to the Chinese classroom is to utilize new

technologies and media of teaching. School authorities in China, as those elsewhere, increasingly realize the importance of computerization, and many of the better-off schools in China are already stacked with state-of-the-art computers. But reports say only a tiny fraction of those computers are adequately utilized. The situation with other educational technologies and media is no better. They are either absent from the school setting or vastly under-used. Few Chinese teachers have acquired the know-how or the drive to make use of these modern facilities.

I therefore would like to pursue first a master's degree and then a Ph.D. degree in instructional technology and media in the United States, where the use of modern educational facilities is undoubtedly the most advanced in the world. Judging by the

information I have culled from your website, I think your institution is an American leader in the research and studies of this field. I am anxious to study under the seasoned

guidance of your distinguished faculty. I hope that, after I complete my advanced training