修改要点:
1.明确写作方向:Philosophy I learned from the movie.(there is much
philosophy in it.)
2.发展方式:每段先摆出分论点——简单阐述分论点——电影细节
支撑——总结(but how?)
3.电影细节的讲述:有理有据,有因有果,不说与分论点无关的废
话(但是好多细节都重合了呀?这样就凑不够1500字了啊),分论点
的概述要基本与电影的发展同步。
4.考虑开头与结尾的论述方式,做到从电影里拎出来,但是又不能
脱离电影。
5.标题的拟定。
You Must Believe
A panda, Po, never thought about being a hero of Kungfu, but he made
it under the helping of Ooyway, Shifu, the Furious Five and also his own
efforts. Interest is the best teacher. Po, a fat panda whose family is making a
living by selling noodles in a small valley, dreams of being the most
heroic hero who is the great master that everyone feared and loved. Every
night after he falls in asleep, he dreams about Kungfu and the wonderful
life he spend with his awesome Kungfu. He does love Kungfu not only in
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